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By Talisker
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25 February 2007 |
Emotions are beach glass sharp and dangerous new slowly, slowly, smoothed by the relentless push-pull of life’s tidal flows Eventually, sharp shards of hatred, envy, love feel pebble-sleek appear as aquamarines refracting harsh sunlight into gentle pools of blue Time does her work sand eternal glass diminishable the beach takes back her own Oli 25/02/07 |
Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 25th February 2007 | Time does her work and wears us all back to nothing. This left me feeling a bit down Oli.
Thought you worked the metaphor very well. It occurred to me that even beach glass can be sharp and dangerous/vibrant again. If it's big enough it can break and expose sharp edges, just as dormant emotions can resurface and cut through middle aged equilibrium.
That last verse really is effective.
Phil. |
Written by Fledermaus (3281 comments posted) 25th February 2007 | | Touching poem and a great metaphor. Especially the second stanza contained some nice images. |
Written by fellpony (1608 comments posted) 26th February 2007 | | Liked it very much Oli - nothing to add to our friends' reviews though! |
Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 26th February 2007 | Last stanza particularly struck a chord. Good piece, liked the metaphor.
Elli | Beach Glass
Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 27th February 2007 | | This is a deep poem, Oli, but I have to agree with you. Emotions are like glass, and can be sharp to the touch - but we also have the emotions of joy and thankfulness, which are uplifting too. I agree with all that has been said, especially Phil's remarks. A very well thought out poem with hidden depths. |
Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 27th February 2007 | Thanks friends.
I was still in the Ash Wednesday "Dust to Dust" mode - hence your initial emotions Phil.
But this poem is really about time's "healing" properties, the perspective that it gives us, the importance of allowing "sharp" emotions time to "smooth off". That was the idea anyway, whether it worked or not 
Thanks again!
oli  | Nice image
Written by bwoz (125 comments posted) 3rd March 2007 | I like the beach anaolgy. To me it seems the smoothness of each person's "beach glass" emotions is that others become familiar with their emotional traits.
When they meet someone new those traits sometimes seem a little sharp around the edges again. I have met some people I didn't think I would get along with because their rough edges -- the ones everyone else had learned to accept -- were very new to me. Once the smoothing affect of time worked its magic those rough edges didn't seem so sharp to me.
Excellent piece, and a great ending that sums up the passage of time very well.
BW |
Written by Crayfish (11 comments posted) 23rd March 2008 | | Simple and concise. I feel Im left with new metaphors tumbling from your poem. Thanks! |
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