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Shorty Short McShort Homework |
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By rilLie
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28 February 2007 |
riight.. this an english homework.. and I haven't really been writing that much lately, so.. yeah.. X_X this might be total crap.. tell me! the homework was to write any single-verse poem (that's really short O,o) that's confusing, I think.. or maybe I wasn't listening properly, I don't know.. ^_^
a/n attack as you please.
ps. i haven't been writing anything good lately.. so sorry!! my muses died on me.. ;_;
anyway, to people with DA, i have a new wallpaper!! http://rillie.deviantart.com Have you lived with your eyes half-open?
What's to know of what is done?
For how could I let go of someone
who taught me to hold on?|
Clever!
Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 28th February 2007 | Eyes half open (therefore half-closed) YES that is most of us.
The second line confuses me.
But your final question is great:
"how could I let go of someone
who taught me to hold on?"
I guess just because he/she taught you to hold on (to them?), you can still use that ability to grab hold of another! Voila! Seems like another "many fish in the sea" teen angst problem. But thats just my interpretation, and probably flawed, like me.
Oli 
P.S. Please reassure me that it is "deviant art" and not "deviant tart" !
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Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 28th February 2007 | thanks, a lot. 
sort'a teen.. :D yeah.. my birthday's coming!!!yey!! yah.
-is hyper-
it's deviant art. rofl. At first, when my friend Czaren told me about the site, i thought it was food too. Devian Tart..
and i was asking her... what kind of food devian was..and she laughed at me.. :P
ayt.
grinning,
rai. |
Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 28th February 2007 | Classic stuff rilLie - Oli wasn't referring to the foodstuff!
Anyway, liked the poem. For a short piece it had a good structure and roundedness to it. Good start and end, as Oli, I'm a bit at a loss about second line.
Much better than of late.
Phil. |
Written by Fledermaus (3307 comments posted) 28th February 2007 | | I totally agree with Oli that the last two lines are great. If this is homework you should get a good mark. |
Written by rilLie (327 comments posted) 1st March 2007 | Phil -- I know.. X_X I'm sooo happy.. I finally wrote something worthwhile.. I've been like.. ermm. dead in my writing life for the past few weeks. :D
Fledermaus -- thanks. I did, actually. The teacher liked it a lot and she read it to the whole class.. which is partly embarrassing.. but still. XP
ayt. thanks, all. ^_^ |
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