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If I Could Fall Down From the Sky
By rilLie
01 March 2007
yeah..XD I have no idea what to make of this,.. but yeah. :D

a/n: attack as you please. :D

If I could fall down from the sky
would you let this chance pass by?

Without mother to scream -- she'd fret a lot;
Nor my brother to laugh -- he'd take my spot.

Without my sister to whine -- endless screams;
Nor my father to complain -- endless too, it seems.

Without my classmates to giggle -- that'd be fine;
Nor my teachers to gasp -- and point to the sky.

'Cause you're so, so afraid for people to see.
If that ever happens, will you catch me?

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If I could ----
Written by Josie (2780 comments posted) 1st March 2007
It's difficult to understand your meaning here RiLie. The first two lines are not at all clear to me. Perhaps you should have written "If I should fall down . . . ." - and then again I would ask: Why are you in the sky in the first place? But to answer your question at the end: "Yes, I think you are worth the catching." I'm afraid that my logical mind didn't quite make sense of what you were saying.

Written by Fledermaus (3246 comments posted) 1st March 2007
Indeed the meaning is a little difficult to grasp, but I loved the structure. Except for 'fine'-'sky', the rhyme was good and the way you split up the lines is great.

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