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The Broken Man
By LaughterLines
26 June 2005
He has no name this broken man
he drinks and doesn't give a damn
my heart goes out to this poor soul
for this man doesn't have a goal

His life consists of drugs and drink
A bewildered man he cannot think
he's lost his siblings and his wife
and has no interests in his life

I'll find him sat on his park bench
he has no cash and starts to wrench
withdrawal from his drugs and drink
this sad old soul just cannot think

An homeless man without a bed
just what goes on inside his head
he's reached his lowest point in life
and weeps all day for his dear wife

One day this broken soul was found
His body lifeless on the ground
I tried my best to help this man
the rest out there didn't give a damn

Reviews
very true
Written by sara (29 comments posted) 26th June 2005
Very true and well written. Reminds me of my years in South London when "this broken soul" was a familiar sight. Very sad.

Written by LaughterLines (34 comments posted) 26th June 2005
Thanks for leaving your comments Sara, very much appreciated. Thank you 
 
LL :)
the broken man
Written by paulgpaul (37 comments posted) 27th June 2005
although i found the sentiment of the poem quite touching, i thought the use of the word 'this' three times in the first stanza and then twice more in the last rather irksome. i can't come up immediately with alternative suggestions, but it's your poem and if you're happy with its construction then so be it!

Written by LaughterLines (34 comments posted) 27th June 2005
Hello Paul, thanks for dropping by and taking the time leaving a review. I actually agree with you looking back at it that 'this' does repeat too much doesn't it. 
Thanks again for pointing this out, much appreciated. 
 
LL :)
good write
Written by maipenrai (780 comments posted) 27th June 2005
this is a good piece telling the a common tale of a failure of our so called caring society

Written by LaughterLines (34 comments posted) 27th June 2005
Thank you Maipenrai. :)

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