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lingua latina
By no1butClo
05 March 2007
schooly one, my AS latin class is brilliant:

this is for The Boys =)

PS reckon I could expand it?

In this classroom, a thousand years
have washed between my ears
and out again. With cups of tea
we read of adventures at sea,
of corrupt senators, and kings
who sought to do their rivals in
by any means thought possible
(take note: no old philosophers).

In this room I learned to translate
Latin, 'til the prose reached a state
of beauty - logic at it's best;
our skiilled pen-tips put to test.
but while I swing back on this chair
draw a little, play with my hair,
and take another sip of tea
I think about taking PE.

Reviews
Well done Clo
Written by Josie (2847 comments posted) 5th March 2007
I loved especially the first two lines - "a thousand years have washed between my ears." How will it feel 50 years on then? As a "teenager???" - I'd like to know what you thought of my parenting poem. How would you, as a youngster, teach those who come to a parenting class? ha ha Think about it after the PE but whilst sipping your tea.
Et tu Brute?
Written by Fledermaus (3492 comments posted) 5th March 2007
Physical Education instead of Latin? 
It seems Latin is a very handy tool if you're going to study other languages. French, Spanish etc. are of course derived from it, but I noticed that if one's trying to learn other Indo-European languages it's very handy to know something about tenses and cases. 
Translating stories is a great way to learn languages isn't it? Nice poem :)

Written by Phil (6963 comments posted) 5th March 2007
Very different from your usual stuff. I enjoyed its light-hearted tone. I wish I'd stuck with Latin a little longer. I only did one year. 
 
Phil.

Written by ellipinnock (1790 comments posted) 6th March 2007
mmm didn't do much for me though I can't quite put a finger on why. Started ok - I liked the first statement. thought the ending too flippant. Not sure why you lost the strict rhyming in the second half of the first stanza. Also not sure about the bit in brackets. 
 
Not sure the light-hearted tone came off this time around but it's always good to try new things! 
 
Elli

Written by mmSeason (32 comments posted) 26th March 2007
Very good poem. I wasn't sure which point you were making: keen to escape the Latin, or sorry that PE nudges into your thoughts distracting from the Latin? Since the thousand years have washed "out again" presumably the latter? Great opening 2.5 lines btw. 
 
I loved Latin, years later realised writing poems uses the same muscle, and am recently discovering cryptic crosswords do too! 80) 
 
Nit-picking (all in the second half): 
- "till" is a word in its own right, no need to shorten "until" to "'til" 
- "its" not "it's" in this context please! - compare the possessive "yours" 
- and the "but" needs a capital, or did you not intend the full stop? 
 
Sorry, you woke the Latinist pedant in me! ;)  
mand

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