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Poetry
Don't Give Up
By Josie
08 March 2007
I dedicate this poem to Bloodange and all other people who feel that they have been let down in life by those they love.  I was let down by the man I loved when I was in my 20s.  Broken hearted, I was persuaded by friends to pick myself up and go to a dance.  Although I had said I had finished with men (and what woman hasn't said that?), I went to the dance.  I met another young man, and, guess what?  We have been married 39 years now.  So, yes, listen to friends, and look outwards.  Looking inwards too long can wreck your life.  What do the rest of you say?



When the end of the road seems far from sight
And the day that was sunny has turned to night
   When your cheerful spirit is worn and frayed
    And perhaps, inside, you’re quite afraid.

             Don’t give up, though the going’s tough –
             Stick to your course, though the road be rough.

When those whom you loved have betrayed your trust -
When your spirits have drowned and the world’s  unjust.
    Life’s a bit of a brute – you feel bruised inside –
    You’ve an aching heart and a wounded pride.

               Don’t give up, though the going’s tough
              Stick to your course, though the road be rough.

Look outwards, help others who are far worse than you -
And you’ll discover quite quickly there are more than a few.
    Shut the door on your grievances -  put a smile on your face.
    Then give the best of yourself to the whole human race.





copyright 2007
www.whiteheadm.co.uk


Reviews

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3141 comments posted) 8th March 2007
Nice sentiments,Josie. It feels like it's song lyrics. is it a song? The last line felt jarred. It was too intimate a work to encompass the whole human race.That's how I felt about it anyway. 
cheers 
J
To Bottleblondesurfer
Written by Josie (2500 comments posted) 8th March 2007
Yes, you are right - you can't help everyone in the world, but it is surprising how many you can actually help, and our writing is open to the whole world. The last line was jarred. I hate that. I have corrected it. Thanks for pointing it out. I appreciate it.

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 11th March 2007
Yeh this does feel like a song lyric. I guess this is what we aim for although we don't always manage to put a smile on things. 
 
Elli

Written by Talisker (1300 comments posted) 12th March 2007
Does read like song lyrics - remember David "Hutch" Soul with his "Don't Give Up
Sorry...hit the wrong key...
Written by Talisker (1300 comments posted) 12th March 2007
Yes, David Soul's 1977 classic "Don't Give Up on Us" 
 
Don't give up on us baby, 
don't make the wrong seem right, 
the future isn't just one night, 
it's written in the moonlight... 
 
Got a few moon dances to that one at school discos! 
 
Thanks for the memories! 
 
Oli :)

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