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By bwoz
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10 March 2007 |
A little light reading A speck of lint drifts from the corner on the wake of my passing by then spindle legs extend like stilettos and whisper across the kitchen floor My heart LEAPS Out of control and impossible to sweep it glides behind the couch and there it grows into the largest menace in the house, Do not sit down |
help!
Written by fellpony (1723 comments posted) 10th March 2007 | I don't mind spiders, but you obviously do!
I enjoyed this. Both a moment and a human reaction to it, captured with considerable humour. | Whisper Legs
Written by CliffBowes (176 comments posted) 10th March 2007 | | This captures the feelings of arachnophobia very well indeed. The last line was masterful. For the last few months we had a spider living on our kitchen window, he was a cute, red little fellow. I used to feed him swatted flies and the occasional wasp. 'Arry, as we called him, died last week and we felt quite sad. | A Confession
Written by Josie (2847 comments posted) 10th March 2007 | | If you hear that my husband has died, please come to my rescue someone, for I do not think I could live alone in a house because of my fear of "spindle-legs". It is the same with moths - and yet, I can see them in the garden quite happily with no fear. Why, oh, why do "spindle-legs" frighten people inside their own homes? I thought you wrote this little poem very skilfully and I loved your expressions such as "stilettos". Very good. |
Written by Phil (6963 comments posted) 10th March 2007 | All been said really. Amusing and well written piece.
Phil. |
Written by ellipinnock (1790 comments posted) 11th March 2007 | Yep - not a lot to add to the others except to say that I wasn't keen on the capitals. I liked the menace of the last line! Nice, humourous piece - enjoyed it
Elli |
Written by gutterkitty (362 comments posted) 12th March 2007 | | Yep, lovely. Great title too! I would get rid of the capitals, though, and add full stops to the fourth line and the last. Also, in the last stanza, the lines diminish in size when the description is of something growing- just something to think about. | Swept away
Written by andybyers (181 comments posted) 1st August 2007 | | It’s nicely characterized. Isn’t that always the way? A spider is never a spider at first glance, it’s always something else… then that sudden primal realization hits you. Well captured. A photograph of emotion in words. |
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