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ecstasy come-down
By alandavidpritchard
30 June 2005

Let's leave this behind,

this too muchness we call

fun,

let's just drop it,

giddy-being

 

and

dizzy-drenched,

drop it like a bad habit.

Drop it because we have

forgotten to be -

climbing loses its appeal

when you live at the peak,

and we,  having been high too long,

having tried to seek everything

in one go

too soon,

now

must come

down.

And there are no

elevator-cable cars,

and there are no

safety nets

and there is no

help-line,

or parachute,

 

Just

    inevitable

              falling,

this amazing

plummet.

 

 

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Written by sara (29 comments posted) 30th June 2005
Found this very powerful. Just a personal opinion, I would lose the last 3 words so that the poem ends ... just inevitable falling ... think it would have more impact, but that's just me !

Written by alandavidpritchard (59 comments posted) 1st July 2005
for those who have ever taken ecstasy and who know what the come down is like, there is always the feeling that despite feeling kinda blue, you're still kinda thrilled at having had the "up" experience in the first place... i like the last three words because they remind you of the ecstasy part of the experience

Written by alandavidpritchard (59 comments posted) 1st July 2005
and it adds an ironic element to the piece

Written by sara (29 comments posted) 2nd July 2005
Point taken ! Sorry, didn't mean to offend.

Written by alandavidpritchard (59 comments posted) 2nd July 2005
no offence taken at all, thank you for responding

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