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Politician
Written by fellpony
10 March 2007
I seem to be pursuing a theme here ... this is a Shakespearean sonnet form, abab cdcd efef gg.

He entered politics; in highest hope
Longed to redress the pangs of human woe;
Seeing the older men, who could not cope,
He saw a dearth and would not have it so.

But now, review the hard lines round his eyes,
The wreckage where his highest hopes have died;
Because all opposition was unwise,
Roughshod on his ideals he let them ride.

So now he’s joined the league of hard-faced men,
And bitter are the cheers he  thought so sweet;
Ruling, he’ll learn to bite the hardest when
He’s conscience-pricked by people at his feet.

Feel sorry for him? No; it wasn’t long
Before he learnt that doing right was wrong.

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Really clever thinking
Written by patterjack (1328 comments posted) 10th March 2007
and really skilful construction  
 
patterjack

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3444 comments posted) 11th March 2007
I've heard it said that all political careers end in failure. The technicalities of it were lost on me but I noticed it rhymed which impressed me. And, as already stated, it was a very clever piece. I think you've encpasulated just about every political career, and so well expressed,too. 
cheers 
J
Politician
Written by CliffBowes (176 comments posted) 11th March 2007
I really like the English sonnet and this is an excellent example. I think the present occupant of No. 10 should use it as a preface to his autobiography. 

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 11th March 2007
I liked this one too. Again very skilful (having a bit of jamais vu with that word today!) in construction. I thought the last couplet very good - it encompasses so much, a good epigram almost in its own right. Been back to this a couple of times and I think I like it more at each visit. 
 
Elli

Written by Fledermaus (3448 comments posted) 11th March 2007
What can I add to what has been said already? Skillful indeed and I liked the content.

Written by Phil (6836 comments posted) 11th March 2007
Liked this too Sue. As has been said - a clever piece. Personally, I think you were pretty generous. Lines five and six are sticking in my head. 
 
Back to sonnets. (and my education) This one sounded like a sonnet for the opposite of all the reasons I gave in the last. Is that a pretty good rule of thumb? 
 
Phil. 
 

Written by Livinginanattic (465 comments posted) 11th March 2007
I don't know the technicalities of sonnets but I enjoyed this. Very sad but true.

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