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By LilGryphMaster
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23 March 2005 |
I wrote this a few summers ago. I had met this wonderful girl at camp, but then I had to leave her when camp was over. I was heartbroken for weeks afterward. And this is the by-product of my depression. Enjoy it! Your face surpasses everything I see
Nothing compares to your captivating beauty Your eyes are like a crystal lake
They're absence makes my heart ache Your glowing smile invites me to a gentle kiss
Your delicate face I will surely miss That last gaze upon your face, I promise I won't forget
I recall that last moment, and I'll always remember it The last thing I thought to myself, right there and then
Was that I would most definitely see you again |
Awwwww
Written by spiderbaby49 (137 comments posted) 30th March 2005 |  sniff.....good little snapshot of an aching heart.
spidey | Last two lines
Written by IPFaulkner (83 comments posted) 18th May 2006 | Love the finish. The certainty that this was not over and only perhaps much later realising it is.
IP |
Written by B.D. (82 comments posted) 31st May 2006 | | Very good and awesome rhyme!! In the 2nd stanza, I think you made a slight spelling mistake, writing "They're" but meaning "Their"?? | ...
Written by no1butClo (341 comments posted) 3rd September 2006 | lovely poem, justifiably cliched with good rhyming [i admire you as i suck at both of those]
reminds me of long distance relationships i get into with irritating regularity...can empathise completely =)
well done!
clo xxx |
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