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On Reflection
By no1butClo
13 March 2007
In the words of Morley: eij?

Not sure...help =)


It's amazing how we can be
blind to ourselves; no man
is a better master of disguise
than when he's looking in the
mirror.

Perhaps the only way to see
ourselves in the light of day is to
watch the dirty bathwater - our own
filth diluted - and even then the

rose-tint lingers, just below the surface

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Written by Talisker (1328 comments posted) 13th March 2007
Not too sure about this one Chloe.  
 
I think mirrors are pretty truthful, in fact brutally so :grin  
 
However, if you mean that they show the body, but perhaps hide the soul... 
 
For me, "filth" is quite a strong word. Unless you are doing a particularly dirty job, your bath water should resemble mine, fragrant and crystal clear. 
 
Oli :)
F 'n' L!
Written by Talisker (1328 comments posted) 13th March 2007
You'll probably wish to reverse them in the title! 
 
Oli :grin

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 13th March 2007
I liked this. My mirror lies to me all the time as I always approach it with caution and a smiling face. When you come across yourself in a mirror that you aren't expecting to find, you can get a real shock. 
 
I would work on this a little, Chloe -- perhaps put it aside for a bit -- but then come back to me. It is a good idea.

Written by Phil (6836 comments posted) 13th March 2007
Really liked the first stanza, liked the idea of the second, but not sure it worked well enough. 
 
As a piece, it's definitely worthy of a little more attention. 
 
Phil.

Written by Kathy (220 comments posted) 21st March 2007
I thought that this was really well observed and cleverly thought out. We do tend to delude ourselves about what or who we really are at times, it can be hard to gain a true image, as you say so well in this.  
 
For some reason, I would like to see an experiment with these two thoughts put into varying poetic forms, to see what it would do to them. I suppose that I am not sure that you have quite presented them to their best advantage. 
 
Not sure wether I have helped or hindered! 
 
Kathy

Written by Kathy (220 comments posted) 21st March 2007
Oops, 'whether' even!  
Kathy

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