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The Love of Victor - (550 words)
By wattle
14 March 2007
wattle - no one special, just a dreamer who found an old pen.

It was a hot, humid Sunday afternoon and for no particular reason we were wondering the streets like so many other aimless people. Senselessly burning fuel, heading no-where, in a hurry to return to our starting point via a destination not yet discovered.

 
Our lust for something different, some meaning was not yet satisfied, but with the sun sinking westward and the sea breeze surely closer. We punched home into the GPS and set our course for the quickest direction to recover the still waiting drudgery of the sameness in our existence.

 
We were on the home stretch with familiarity rapidly being painted to the tapestry scrolling around us. Negotiating space from the pee sized communal brain controlling the three four-wheel drives that must have been connected by an unseen string, taking two full lanes to do the work requiring one. We entered the round about, only wishing to make a quick left at the first exit in just a few meters. We rounded the curve, topped the hill and commenced the decent past houses and people who all knew where they were. On the left near the bus stop she was there, a goddess. Blonde hair collected to the back in a ponytail, blue-green singlet filled with the shapely form of youth-like femininity. Bottle blue working, short, short stubbies topping long slender legs with tips that vanish into heavy work boots, professionally adorned with folded down socks. A seductive combination of elegant independence, clearly displaying an unseen sign with ‘self-made, proud and no-bodies property’ written for all to see. A warning offered to all who possess the desire to own or covert.

 
Lady left the air-conditioning stream and dived for her open window, several snorts later she turned to me. Multiple puggs were hiding somewhere and she was much to slim; small portions would never suit us; the message was all over Lady’s face.

 
I watched as best I could, she was not alone; Victor was there, he was mature but could clearly still perform well. She held him firmly by barely visible handles above his pounding heart. Her fingers massaged and stroked him, pressing buttons in an effort to motivate every last morsel of his strength as they rolled back and forward. They moved together as one, they moved in opposing directions. Reinforcing the union as each re-couple melting them together again; they were always meant to be so. Their heated efforts visible for all to see; he made all the noise, puffing and grinding away, making every effort to please her. His piston plunging performance, desperate short grabs for air and constant puff of his steaming exhaust. Her fair skin displaying many small droplets from their fired coupling, backed by the shinning glow of perspiration along the full length of her contours, a signature union in this physical ballad which continued unabated until their was nothing more for them to do.

His purpose served she silenced him and dispatched him to the garage to cool off, alone. She dropped to the step with a cool drink and surveyed her dominion, a lust for more still glowing through those wanting eyes.

 
I turned to Lady, she was correct. We had no place here no one was going to drive a wedge between this couple.

Reviews

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3445 comments posted) 14th March 2007
I've read this twice and I still can't mesh the first bit of the story with the second. the style seems to change a bit too.It's me I know I struggle with subtext and subtley.  
I liked the first half, it painted a very vivid picute in my mind. I could almost feel the hot sticky air. I always enjoy your writing I just dont always "get" it 
cheers 
J
Thank you BBS-J
Written by wattle (117 comments posted) 14th March 2007
It's a bit silly - the first half is my ‘normal’ writing, the second half is ‘me’ trying to be romantic with a lawn mover's involvement. (I'm nuts - anything to get me writing again/more/better.)

Written by Phil (6836 comments posted) 15th March 2007
With BBS on this one. Enjoyed the first half - evocotive and effective in engaging the senses - but can't connect the second half to it. 
 
Perhaps I'm being dense. 
 
Anyway - good to see you back on the boards, 
 
Phil.
Thank you Phil
Written by wattle (117 comments posted) 15th March 2007
I guess lawn mowers don't do it for you. ---- Ha - I'll try harder next time (Thank you)

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 20th March 2007
Lawn mower huh...well I didn't get that the first time around! maybe we all need to drag our minds out of the gutter. very odd but still enjoyable! 
 
elli

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