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Poetry
Black Gold
By Flippy_D
01 July 2005
Scribbled this down as I sat waiting to be picked up from school. First attempt at a protest poem.

There are cranes in the distance,
Through the orange waves of the evening nod the mighty.
Nod, nod.

Sweet fumes, sweeter far than any blood is sweet,
Or sweat or wild metal.

But that's not quite right.
See it in the clearer light.
Pray by headlamps for the dust
Untouched by water,
Think of misplaced trust.

And this one, and these,
And also that and those,
Bound in banadages and uniform
(Where it is not lost - barbed or torn),
Or this, a helmet of hair and water and the cross.
The tent shivers in the still heat.

For the wounded,
And the done.
Underneath the desert sun
With rifles stacked, and medication strewn across the floor.

For the timing,
And the place,
Those less fortunate in the race to stay alive but
Face the danger,
There's no stranger war than this.

All the President's men
And a bullet's kiss.

"Never again; Nevermore."

Reviews
excellent
Written by maipenrai (784 comments posted) 2nd July 2005
an excellent piece of work, well done

Written by no1butClo (341 comments posted) 24th December 2006
"sweet...sweeter far" 
 
didn't realise you'd heard that hymn, we must have done it at an evensong...well used though. 
 
had to think about this one, might print it since it's one of those that's easier to read on paper than on the screen. 
 
thought I should let you know, you've got about three in the 'burian. 
 
me x

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