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300 - Persia
By Fledermaus
17 March 2007
The movie isn't out over here yet, but I read it caused a lot of reactions in the USA, as appearantly it's very one sided, pro-Greek and anti-Persian.
So here are two poems to give a very one sided view to counterbalance it:
The first is about the destruction of Persepolis by the Greeks

The city of the great kings
The capital of the world
Filled with gold and many things
By king Cyrus it was it built

Alexander burned this town
After Darius was killed
Precious statues were torn down
Once crafted by artists skilled

How many died in those flames
How much did the Greeks destroy
Fell victim to Helen games
In this second eastern Troy?


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Written by ellipinnock (1790 comments posted) 17th March 2007
mmm interesting in terms of the history but doesn't rusing the preally do much for me as a poem - bit lumpy and because it's factual narrative type stuff you're setting yourself a hard task to engage the reader. 
 
Might have been better with a different vehicle, perhaps personalising it and using the perspective of someone who was there. Needs a bit more imagination to pull this off I think. 
 
Elli

Written by CrazyBubbles (10 comments posted) 17th March 2007
The poem could use a bit of work in terms of rhyme and rythmn, but the historical message was very intersting. I'd never heard the story told from the Persian point of view.  
 
 
 
:)  
 
CrazyBubbles

Written by Fledermaus (3492 comments posted) 19th March 2007
Thanks Elli and Bubbles. 
I'll see how I can improve this ;)

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