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Not For The World
By Talisker
18 March 2007
On Mother's day - I suppose that this is equivalent to a bunch of triffids. Nevertheless, its how the muse took me. Its about twin-ness, its about choice (or lack of it), its about how life can be hard from the beginning, and who knows how early the die is cast?

Nine months,

bubble wrapped

in the padded envelope

of your fecundity.

 

Germinating.

Taking form.

A welcome parasite,

hosted in the gist

of your womanhood.

 

Yet not alone,

no one-to-one.

Struggling

with one stronger,

more determined

to be.

 

The very throes of birth

gave you cause to curse me.

Arse over tit, I fought,

not to go

toward the light.

 

An inauspicious start

some may say.

 

Oli (Mother’s Day – 18/03/07)

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Written by Phil (6635 comments posted) 18th March 2007
God Oli - talk about poetry having layers of meaning. Couldn't help feeling very sad at the end of this. I sometimes wonder about the twinness of being a twin. My dad's an identical twin - and let me tell you - I often wonder about that one. 
 
This kept pulling me back for another read - and another possible perspective. This could be taken one of many, or several of many different ways. I guess only you know the answers to the many questions this provokes. (All personal, so I won't ask.) 
 
Very effective Oli. 
 
I hope you're feeling more cheery than this sounds. 
 
All the best, Phil 

Written by Kathy (220 comments posted) 18th March 2007
Hello Oli 
 
I fear that this is all too true for many poor souls, it does seem to be a bit of a lottery. Ideal motherhood is certainly a myth, mothers have human failings too. 
 
Third and last stanzas are particularly telling, I am lacking in full understanding of the third stanza but I will be in the minority. I like your directness and I liked this, it was searingly truthful. 
 
Kathy
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Written by KaydieKate (63 comments posted) 4th August 2008
Had to read several times, each time taking another meaning. Well thought out. Good read.

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