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Poetry
'If'
By KateRussellVampress
20 March 2007
Just dreamin away of far away places-'If'


IF


If I could go just anywhere

I know where It would be

A place of gorgeous lush green hills

A view as far as I could see


 

Where sun would shine throughout the day

A weather crisp and cool and bright

And soften to a warmer breeze

At the approach of each new night


 

The people would be friendly

Each offering up their smile

And passers-by would tip their hats

And stop to chat a while


 

At oceans edge the waves would splash

Into a frothy whipped up cream

And clouds would laze across the sky

As I lay to watch and dream


 

Crystal clear, deep springs would flow

With water fresh and sweet

And you could see the worlds reflection

In the ripples at your feet


 

The flowers washed across the fields

Would paint pictures through the grass

And fill your eyes with colour

As you wandered down your path


 

The butterflies that dined among them

Would all flicker and take flight

As if the petals come alive

To dance into the night


 

The smell of delicacies on the wind

Would tempt the strongest will

And would be ready just as we were

Until all had had their fill


 

So if I could go just anywhere

This is where I’d be

But of course I wouldn’t go there

Unless you came with me.

Reviews

Written by Phil (6738 comments posted) 20th March 2007
It seems to be a competent poem of its type. I have to be honest and say it's not for me. I find the content a little trite. That is not to say this does not have worth - it just doesn't suit my ear. Sorry, 
 
Phil.

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