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Poetry
Fall Behind
By KateRussellVampress
20 March 2007
Just a little about loss in love

 

Fall behind

 

 

Behind these eyes there once was love

But now there’s only pain

Behind these eyes there once was fire

But you have dulled the flames

 


Behind these eyes there once was hope

But now it’s slowly dying

Behind these eyes there once was strength

But now it has stopped trying


 

Behind these eyes there once was passion

But now the blood runs cold

Behind these eyes there once was soul

But this one has been sold

 


Behind these eyes there once was pride

But now there is a hollow

Behind these eyes there once was focus

But they’ve lost their path to follow

 


Behind these eyes there once was me

But now I don’t know who that was

Behind these eyes there once was life

But now that life is lost

 


Behind these eyes there once was thoughts

Of living life with you

If only they had strength enough

That you could see them too.

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Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3362 comments posted) 21st March 2007
The constant repetiton at first grated then won me over.It came across as almost obsessive which love can often be 
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