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Niddry Raws
By Talisker
21 March 2007
Some of you may be surprised to know that from the 1850s until the early 1900s my little area of Scotland saw the world's first "oil boom".  The pioneer James "Parrafin" Young, patented the process of refining oil from raw shale ("red blaize") which was mined locally (a very hazardous process). The largest oil refinery in the world was at Addiewell, three miles from where I live.  Oil from these works fuelled half the street lamps in london, produced chemicals for most of the world's paint and also wax for most of the world's candles.  Most of the miners' houses were demolished long ago, but Niddry Raws (rows) still stands - about thirty cottages  - oil refining in this area ended in the 1960s. 

The cinder pyramids I refer to are the slag heaps or "bings" where the waste products were piled.  These now resemble strange hillocks on the landscape, some hundreds of feet high.


It started here.

Before the Persian dunes
were leached of tarry blood

Before the derricks rose
above the Texan plains

This little group of cottages
where hardy miners
laid their work-worn bones
in proud-humble beds

Day-by day they blasted
tore and scraped
loaded and hauled
nuts of red shale

No whisky distilled here;
But paraffin to light
a half of London town

Wax for a billion candles
to illuminate an empire
where the sun did set
eventually

These cinder pyramids
terracotta in the gloaming
now scarred with green
an old testament

Oli (21/03/07)

Reviews

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 21st March 2007
I like this very much, Oli. Can't say more as this @&^%$£-ing computer is messing up again and blacking out on me, but I just wanted to let you know.  
 
This goes with the other pieces -- the Harrisons and Dardanelles (sp).

Written by Phil (6963 comments posted) 21st March 2007
I like this too Oli. The last stanza finishes this off really well. Brings me back to the present but sends me back to the past at the same time. With Wtzl. This would sit well next to The Harrisons - which is still my favourite. 
 
Phil.

Written by Kathy (220 comments posted) 22nd March 2007
This should appear in some kind of local publication or by the Niddry Raws themselves. I am sure that it would be appreciated by local people as well as by us. 
 
I wonder whether any industry followed when the mining stopped? I bet it didn't. 
 
Kathy
time travel
Written by bwoz (125 comments posted) 24th March 2007
Oli, 
 
as you probably know from some of my writings I favor pieces that involve different elements of time, history, and progress. These elements show a movement, and this poem does that well. 
 
One little suggestion; Texan planes should probably be Texas planes. Texans are people, like Canadians are people. For more authenticity, if you like, you could use the Mexican/Texan word, which is Tejas (Tey - haus). 
 
Good poem, tells the tale very well. 
 
BW

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