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By Rose
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21 March 2007 |
OK, i'm trying to write about my best friend, I have lots of little pieces which I hope to work together somehow, but here is the start. I can picture her now, looking into the mirror. Just from the way she’s sitting I can tell she’s not happy with how she looks. Her head tilts one way, then the next, analysing every freckle, every mole, and every blemish. Her shoulders slump in resignation, but, as she turns she can see me in the doorway. I feel almost guilty for having stared at her for so long, but the smile on her face breaks any anxieties I had been previously feeling. That smile. “Rosie! My sunshine how have you been? I’ve missed you!” At this point she comes towards me, but falters in her stride when she realises I want to hug her. She steps back and I remember her intense phobia of physical contact. I always find this difficult to comprehend. If I told you she was sweet this would never convey the capacity for love in this girl, but still, she cannot hug me. |
Written by Phil (6963 comments posted) 21st March 2007 | Hi Rosie, welcome to GW. Read both of your posts and they're both interesting, if very brief. Really liked the way this started - but then it ended. Promising stuff. Look forward to a meatier piece.
Phil. |
Written by Tusk (53 comments posted) 21st March 2007 | | This is very intriguing. I particularly like the sentance "That smile." I was a tad confused when Alex talks, for a moment I thought it was the narrator talking. Other than that a very well-written short peice. |
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3569 comments posted) 22nd March 2007 | What was there was vividly written. It put me in mind of someone with Aspergers but it is way too short.It's even a bit short for an introduction. It just raises too many questions ,is it Aspergers or a molested child or just shy. What's the story is what I'm asking, I suppose?
cheers
J |
Written by NeilTollfree (51 comments posted) 22nd March 2007 | | Okay, so I'm going to become a fan I think. As above, can we have something bigger please. |
Written by ellipinnock (1790 comments posted) 22nd March 2007 | Yes this is a teaser really isn't it? Raises more questions than it answers. Intriguing...left me wanting more so well done!
Elli |
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