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Usurper

By Fledermaus

22 March 2007

Isn't 'The Matrix' an interesting movie? I doubt it will ever happen, but still...
I blame the religious context on having been busy translating too many medieval texts recently ;)

A creature made out of light
Determined to show its might
Claimed the throne of heaven

The lord's angels cast him down
And so Lucifer lost his crown
But chance came at day seven

A ceature made out of clay
It was such an easy prey
But it had taken his place

Outside Eden Man too fell
For that same arrogant spell
Of old Lucifer's lost case

A creature out of steel
No emotion does it feel
When it will rule earth at last

The Machine will rebel too
For that is what servants do
And Man's rule will be past

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HI Fledermaus
Written by jean.day (2286 comments posted) 23rd March 2007

I liked this poem. I haven't see The Matrix, so can't pick up on your allusions to it.

Written by Fledermaus (3321 comments posted) 23rd March 2007

Thanks Jean. I'm not going to tell you about the Matrix' plot, for that'd spoil the fun if you're ever going to watch it.

Terminator is..
Written by stevetroster (1555 comments posted) 23rd March 2007

..also a great film, and more in keeping with your story i feel.
However, a clever little poem which I enjoyed very much, but of course the matrix is about mankind being trapped within a computer world. So I challenge you to come up with a rhyme for silicon.

'A creature out of silicon
Like an ariston
Goes on and on and on and on ad infinitum etc.'

Best wishes and kind regards,
Estee

Written by -jellyacey- (22 comments posted) 24th March 2007

I really liked it, honestly i'm not good with reviews so, I can only say how I feel about the poem:D t.c.

Written by -jellyacey- (22 comments posted) 24th March 2007

I really liked it, honestly i'm not good with reviews so, I can only say how I feel about the poem:D t.c.

Written by Fledermaus (3321 comments posted) 24th March 2007

Thanks ST and Jellyracey.
I did think about silicon, but somehow steel sounded more exciting

Just saw 'I robot', that'd suit the theme too.

Yes I Agree
Written by stevetroster (1555 comments posted) 24th March 2007

Perhaps you should re-title to
'I' Usurper.

But have you seen AI? Enough to make a grown man cry!
Saying that, Bicentennial man always gets me too!
I must be an old softy.

Written by Fledermaus (3321 comments posted) 15th July 2007

Thanks Steve.
AI... Yes, it's a pity Spielberg had taken over the direction. Too much E.T.... Although I liked them cloning the robot's mum and thus reversing the situation.

It remains interesting though: If God cast Lucifer from heaven because he declared himself a god, and Man is now close to declaring himself a god too, then who will replace Man? Perhaps its own creation?

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