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Superman
By amoryblaine
23 March 2007
Sooner or later
Where the mind holds fear
In awe;I will run around naked
And draw the people near.
Having discovered more than buoyancy
I will with them share
The wonders of a guiltless being
And the comforts of my house of prayer.
Not a religion of pity
No crosses or stones to praise
No lines that are witty
And no 'mysterious ways'
Wasted times such as these
Acting out a play
Everyone knows nobody's watching
Its all right to go astray,I say.
I will gamble on Sundays
Will not turn towards the East
'Tis better to follow my erring heart
"Consummatum Est"it is finished.



Reviews

Written by Fledermaus (3281 comments posted) 23rd March 2007
Uhm... What would they need a religious leader for? They already do so, don't they?  
The idea is funny, but I think this is on the edge of what's still poetry.
Fledermaus
Written by amoryblaine (40 comments posted) 23rd March 2007
I'm glad..correction..am really glad!
Fledermaus
Written by amoryblaine (40 comments posted) 23rd March 2007
I'm glad..correction..am really glad!
Helpful words from...
Written by stevetroster (1549 comments posted) 23rd March 2007
..a fellow non-believer. 
Let us pray that our gambling on Gods absence pays off! 
I have no desire to become a naturist, but admire you for your lack of inhibitions. And if you are of the female sex, do you have any photo's? 
 
And you might want to correct this line: 
(Acitng out a play) Acting? 
 
Best wishes and kind regards 
Estee
Stevetroster
Written by amoryblaine (40 comments posted) 23rd March 2007
...thanx for drawing my attention to the spelling error..completely missed that one..n no im not of the female sex..hehe!Damn and they speak of God huh?Cheers!

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 23rd March 2007
For me - better than some of your other stuff. In fact I liked some of it very much. I do think you'd be better ditching the rhymes for this though - didn't work for me. 
 
Elli

Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 24th March 2007
Was about to write a review, read Elli's and I have nothing to add. So: ditto Elli's comments. 
 
Phil.

Written by JourneyAtNight (314 comments posted) 24th March 2007
Interesting piece and from what I remember, I also thought this was among the best of your other pieces. Some nice touches. 
 
E:)

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