Ok, v.short, just the beginning. Tell me what yoy think!!!! xxxx
Rose Dadley
The Autobiography
Mar 2007
“Honey…” he squeezed my hand tighter as I finally felt that empty feeling in my stomach begin as the plane took off. It hadn’t always been like this, as a young child I was able to fly for 8 hours without a blip, but having a flying phobic for a mother and an insane fear of the universe meant international travel had become something of a problem.
It was my first flight for years, and I was becoming increasingly anxious. Years of counselling had taught me to control my irrational worries of pretty much everything, but the sensation of being disconnected from the earth was too much to bear. “Honey, I really hate this, I mean oh my God.”
“Rosie, for fucks sake, suck on a Werthers or something, just think, I’m sure the pilot doesn’t want to die.”
This obviously got me thinking about death, and the combination of mortality and aircraft was a potent one. I began thinking about how Death seemed to have been a current that had taken me through life. As a child I was obsessed with it. I would ask constantly how Tudor monarchs had died. I didn’t want to know celebrities names, I wanted to know if they were dead, and if they were, how it had happened. No one seemed too phased by this. However, it became a problem when I realised my mortality at the age of 17. This was also the first time I had panicked myself so much I’d passed out.
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What YOY think?
Written by Moonglum (15 comments posted) 23rd March 2007 |
I think that it isn't a short story, so maybe you should take it away and bring it back when it is!
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A nice start
Written by anorwegianwood (278 comments posted) 23rd March 2007 |
I think this could have potential, but there isn't enough here to tell much about it. I'd like to see a little more. I think it's an interesting way to start a piece. I especially like the line, "an insane fear of the universe meant international travel had become something of a problem." Keep it up (and ignore any destructive reviews). 
~Claire |
HI Rose
Written by jean.day (2279 comments posted) 24th March 2007 |
| A good beginning, but it needs padding out. Did you actually pass out on the plane? What happened next? Where were you flying to? |
Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 24th March 2007 |
Nice start to work on. Claire's right, there's nothing much to go here, but it has whetted the appetite. She also picked my favourite line.
Would like to see more.
Phil. |
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