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Why don't we try to be happy

By Nance

24 March 2007

I’m very nervous. I haven’t written anything for a long time. Please, leave your comments.

Why don’t we try to be happy,
Humanly happy indeed?
Let us forget our doubts,
This is the thing we don’t need.

Let us quit judging the fears,
All that we happened to face.
Why can’t we let go of sorrow
Which we decided to trace?

It’s never late to get smiling
Instead of loosing your hope.
After all, you’re only human,
Sometimes you just cannot cope!

Never give way to your sadness,
You’d better throw it away!
Life is too great to neglect it,
Start being happy today!

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Written by Phil (6828 comments posted) 24th March 2007

Two issues for me here. The content and the poetry.

It may seem odd, but I can't agree with your idea that we should all be happy all the time. I'd love to be happy all the time, but happiness, along with everything else is relative and can only be experienced in juxtaposition to other emotions. Sadness, anger etc have much to commend them. They allow us to rationalise our existence and see things in context. Sorry - sounds like a lecture. Just rying to explain why I didn't buy into the too simple idea of your poem.

The verse bounces along quite happily but expresses your ideas in pretty trite terms.

Having remembered you are from the Ukraine (I think) I assume English is not your first language. If that's the case you can probably ignore most of the above. To write a poem in English is quite an achievement.

Phil.

Thanks Phil
Written by Nance (86 comments posted) 24th March 2007

Thank you, Phil, for reviewing my work, it's very important. I can learn through your advice, and thus my works will probably get better. I put into this very verse my emotion. It depicts my inner world. I do think people (including me) have become too gloomy recently. So I daresay them should try to be happy, at least more than they are. I didn't mean they must absolutely avoid sadness, yet bad cheer shouldn't overcoe them completely! I understand I just haven't put all that I think of it into this work.
Hope to hear from you,
thanks once again.
Nance.

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