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Love Struck <3
By Love_Lost_Poet
25 March 2007

 

I wrote this piece when i had just had a fight with a gurl that  i had truly loved


 

 


Are we nothing but pages?

I still love you

We climbed the romantical love stages

Hoped we could have lasted

 Through times and dark ages

Bring us back to where we was

To where our love twas

 

December in which those pages

Written to remember,

My love, misunderstood dilemma

 

Look up at the skies nights

Paint your face in stars, which shone bright

That gave me your miraculous sight

Riding through you mind

To the sunset alight


Turning the leaves of your book

That showed you were once Love Struck

Tear drops, Tear stained pages

Ink running words

Not to be released

To hear or be heard

Of your heartbroken words.

 

Behind that crooked smile

Lies a woman with such fulfilling dreams

With a brokenhearted inner child

Within your mind, filled with nothing but the feeling of kind

Waiting to be released and shine

Hearing the crying and laughter

That feeling of your love struck chapter

 

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Love Struck (and the other six)
Written by CliffBowes (176 comments posted) 25th March 2007
Hi LLP and welcome to the GW Site. You have made quite a début, hitting us with seven works all at once. 
I think the ideas behind some of these poems are great, they show you to be a deep thinking person. If you are to be taken seriously, I feel that you should polish up the spelling (there/their and gurl etc) and perhaps look at the grammatical content. 
May I recommend a small book, The Craft of Writing Poetry, by Alison Chisholm. It is published by Alison Busby Ltd. ISBN No. 0 74900 289 1. It is a great little book and I feel it could help you enormously, it costs about a tenner. 
Good luck with your future writings 
Cliff 

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