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Santorini (St. Irene)
By LaNina
25 March 2007
Hello All,

This is my first post on this site! It looks like you give some great feedback.

I was inspired to write this when I went to Santorini and learnt that it's volocanic past wiped out the Minoans from the islands.


I stand and stare, O’ tempestuous beast
O’er the havoc that you wreak,
I cower in the shadow of the magistry you keep.
 

‘From the sea an Empress born, celestial in reign,
Come, bow ‘neath her feet, a statue for to gain.
And beckon she, with thoughts of praise,
Pray pardon, lest this fiend enrage.
 

And she will speak, with all her might
midst confusion and furore.’
 

We stand akimbo, heavy arms resting,
The brethren head bowed, defeat in weighing,
Wash over & away, and chasten be,
Pray end be nigh, be nigh.

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Santorini -Saint Irene
Written by CliffBowes (176 comments posted) 26th March 2007
Hi La Nina, welcome to the GW Site. This is your first posting, but not, I suspect, your first poem. Being a bit of a Grecophile, I enjoyed your work very much and look forward to more of it. The only thing I didn't like was the use of the ampersand in the penultimate line. Nit picking fool that I am. 
Ευτυχές γράψιμο 
Cliff

Written by mmSeason (32 comments posted) 26th March 2007
Hi LaNina! I'm new here too btw. 
 
Thirteen lines - so nearly a sonnet! I do love the mood / atmosphere, but i'm afraid i don't think the archaic language adds anything. 
 
A bit confused about who i / she / we are. Maybe i need to re-read a fourth time. 
 
Santorini is inspiring isn't it! I have had a thing about it and all the theories, and Minoans in general, for a long time. 
 

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