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I am bewitched by you Cecily
By patterjack
26 March 2007
Heartfelt

I must  tell  all  the  world  I  love  your peachy charms

from the  hairs  of  your  head  ,  and  those  on  your  legs  an  arms

Please  now  that  my   entrancement    for  them  has  been  stated 

do  not  have  them  ever  depilated

but  keep  them  so  that  I  can   make  the fondest  strokes  

that will  bring   jealousy  to  lots  of  other   folks

who  cannot run  their  hands  through  them  smooth  and  silky

and  I  also  lover  your   neck  so  white  and  milky

But  you  don't  love  ME  ,  because  I  have  never  spoken

to   you  about  my  passion    my  heart  is  broken

I  should   go  down  on  and  worship  you  on  my  knees   bended 

Please  please  Cecily  ,  choose me

but  if  you  refuse  me  , 

 I  can  tell  you  my  life  will  be ended  .

Reviews

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3351 comments posted) 26th March 2007
Cecily isn't French is she? I believe the women there are, for the most part, strangers to a razor. 
I really enjoyed this and particularly liked the subtle rhyming. Heartfelt but still lighthearted I think 
cheers 
J
ah ! ma chere Cesicle..
Written by patterjack (1193 comments posted) 26th March 2007
... je suis trop enchante d'etre heureux. 
 
zut et puis alors ! un paradoxe. 
 
jean le frappeur
Does Your Wife Know?
Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 26th March 2007
Dear Cecily, dear Cecily,  
I love those rosy lips, 
Your peachy charms, your hairy arms,  
And the fat upon your hips. 
 
You stretch yourself on Bondi Beach, 
With your hairs and knobbly knees - 
But if I declared my love for you  
My wife would murder me. 
 
 
Sorry Brian. I hope this doesn't degrade your poem in any way. ha ha.

Written by Talisker (1326 comments posted) 26th March 2007
Did Jane say "liked the stubble rhyming"? :grin  
 
Is there no end to your lecherousness Brian? One would have thought that the embers would be glowing faintly by now, but apparently not. 
 
If there is a God, please spare me these thoughts in my Autumn years! 
 
Oli :grin
wergle flomp 4?
Written by fellpony (1608 comments posted) 26th March 2007
amusing - and infelicitous enough linguistically to be a contender. No offence Brian! 
 

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 26th March 2007
Now, how did I miss this, Brian? 
 
'I lover your neck, so white and milky.' Damn, that's good. I mean bad, that is.  
 
Okay, I see it's time for me to play hard ball. This is just getting too close!

Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 26th March 2007
You're all forgetting - if it's deliberately funny it can't win.  
Enjoyed. 
 
Phil.

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