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Breeding
By Talisker
26 March 2007
An experiment in making a paltry (hehe) comparison.

Value Child (aspirations removed)

From caged parents

Not free to move

Fed lies

Serving Suggestion: domestic/armed forces


Barn Child (aspirations removed)

From parents allowed limited movement

within social constraints

Fed platitudes

Serving suggestion: civil service


Free Range Child (aspirations included)

From parents allowed free movement

Fed ambition

Serving suggestion: self-serving


Organic Child (aspirations unnecessary)

From important breeding stock

Fed attitude

Serving suggestion: should be served by all


Oli 26/03/07

Reviews

Written by mmSeason (32 comments posted) 26th March 2007
Clever!

Written by mmSeason (32 comments posted) 26th March 2007
Clever!

Written by Phil (6838 comments posted) 26th March 2007
None of them sound that appetising Oli.  
 
First: Emotionally retarded 
Second: Anally retentive 
Third: Public school bully 
Last: Top public school pig. 
 
Enjoyed, but unsure what to take away. 
 
Perhaps I'm taking it too seriously? 
 
Phil.
comparisons
Written by bwoz (125 comments posted) 31st March 2007
Oli, 
 
are those paltry comparisons, or poultry comparisons? 
 
Pardon the punn, could not resist. I wonder, which one am I?  
 
Ignored Child (aspirations irrelavent) 
 
From parents who grew up working 
Fed left-overs, " eat it or else" 
Serving suggestion: tenderize with cleaver 
 
Good Piece 
BW

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