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By no1butClo
26 March 2007
This is the start of something, I'll develop it at some point, but I just want to see what you think, help me out?

A twitch of the lips,
a flick of the hips,
a trace of the slip-
up that occurs
every single time

you look at me. I
can't be tamed to
suffer such transfixion
quietly. My mistake
is clear as ice and

colder still, stealing
over this hot muscle,
slower beating for the
change in temperature
and meaning. Changes

causing me to scream,
run blue murder round my
vocal chords 'til all you'll
hear's an echoing murmur;
they shouldn't quite

define me, but they do.

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Good start
Written by mmSeason (32 comments posted) 26th March 2007
Loved it to start with, lost track about halfway through. The assonance in the first 2 stanzas is great, and the line 3 pun. 
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