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Poetry
Has mercy a place where slaughter is king?.
By BrianRobertNeal
26 March 2007
Lyrics by Kate Bush ( Army Dreamers.), annotated by descriptive verse. It seems sadly relevant today and perhaps forever.

“My little army boy
Is coming home from B.F.P.O.
I've a bunch of purple flowers
To decorate his mammy's hero.”


*****************
The communication quite simply said,
“It’s our tragic duty to have to inform you
 Your son injured in action is now dead.”
He was gone, I’ll grieve, what else can I do?

*****************
“Mourning in the aerodrome,
The weather warmer, he is colder.
Four men in uniform
To carry home my little soldier.

*****************
They kindly sent a car to take me to
The Chapel of rest that he now lay in.
My senses were frozen, nothing got through
Till I was stood by the open coffin.

******************
"What could he do?
Should have been a rock star."
But he didn't have the money for a guitar.

"What could he do?
Should have been a politician."
But he never had a proper education.

"What could he do?
Should have been a father."
But he never even made it to his twenties
.”

**************************
He’d only wanted to be a Soldier.
Joined up at sixteen and in his third year.
So small and helpless, what a sad picture
Wanted to suckle him, just hold him near.

**************************

What a waste --
Army dreamers.
Ooh, what a waste of
Army dreamers.

***************


Knifed to death by an injured enemy
Was told that he would not have felt a thing.
He’d offered water, an act of mercy.
Has mercy a place where slaughter is king?

****************
Tears o'er a tin box.
Oh, Jesus Christ, he wasn't to know,
Like a chicken with a fox,
He couldn't win the war with ego.

*****************
He would be given a hero’s acclaim.
My reply made them look at me oddly.
“I’ll organise his funeral, if it’s all the same
You have had his soul, I’ll have his body

*****************

Give the kid the pick of pips,
And give him all your stripes and ribbons.
Now he's sitting in his hole,
He might as well have buttons and bows.

Reviews
Deja vu
Written by Fledermaus (3159 comments posted) 26th March 2007
Have you already posted this before? It seems very familiar. Still a good piece though.
Hi Batty
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 26th March 2007
I think that you're right. I thought i hadn't however it has been retitled and where the original had a break in the rhyme pattern, I've switched two lines round so they all are ABAB. 
 
Brian
Has mercy a place where slaughter is kin
Written by CliffBowes (176 comments posted) 26th March 2007
I can't seem to find where Kate Bush finishes andBrian starts. Perhaps I am just a thick old man. I love Kate and her songs, so I would like to know where you improve on her. Please. I have noticed that stanza 8 is in a larger font. 
I like the thing though, especially as I live by Catterick Garrison and see some Military Funerals quite often.
Hi CB
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 26th March 2007
Verses 1/3/5/7/9/11 are Kate Bush's 
 
2/4/6/8/10 are mine. 
 
Re changes of font, this is quite accidental, posting on this Web-Site seems to be in the hand of the gods. 
 
It occurred when I switched the then line 3 to 2 and the then line two became line 3 and for some unaccountable reason the Font Size changed. 
 
Thanks for your time and comments. 
 
Brian
Has mercy a place where slaughter is kin
Written by CliffBowes (176 comments posted) 26th March 2007
Hi Brian 
Thanks for enlightening me on those points. 
What with Afghanistan and Iraq this poem is particularly poignant. You have followed Kate's lyrics with a beautiful counterpoint. As I said previously, living by the largest Army Garrison in Europe I find it very moving. I watched an army funeral on Saturday from the comfort of my armchair overlooking the village green and church. Union flag draped coffin, guard of honour and all the trimmings -it doesn't make it any better though does it? 
Cliff
Hi CB
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 26th March 2007
"it doesn't make it any better though does it?" 
 
No. It merely signs it off, for the Military that is. 
 
Brian  

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