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Though I Love You
By -jellyacey-
31 March 2007
Though I love you I can't be with you
though it hurts I must say
That love is not for me and you
though it's true that I love you

Though I love you we can never be
though it hurts I must say
That you and I will never see
the love we share you and me

Though I love you it just breaks my heart
though it hurts I must say
Though you and I will never part
there is someone else who stole your heart.

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Though I Love You
Written by CliffBowes (176 comments posted) 31st March 2007
I found the lack of punctuation (until the final full stop) and the overuse of the word 'though' began to grate on me a little by the last verse. I know that you are still very young and the subject of love is to be taken very seriously, but you will probably lighten up a bit later on in life. Don't stop writing about emotions you feel though. 
Cliff
awww.
Written by mable (2 comments posted) 31st March 2007
this made me a little sad, but evoking any sort of emotion through a poem is a positive step. 
I liked the last two lines very much. 8)

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