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By mable
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31 March 2007 |
This is a poem I wrote recently, it is personal, but I think it can be understood and appriciated by anbody who has ever felt both sides of Love. The feeling that I don’t know where I am.
The feeling that I don’t care where I am.
Your touch can makes me shudder.
and your touch can make me warm. Your breath that leaves me breathless
Your breath that makes me sweet.
My heart knows nothing of sense with you.
My heart cares nothing of sense with you.
For the trouble that love causes
For the joy love brings
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Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 1st April 2007 | Sorry Mable, this leaves me a little cold. There seems to be no focus to this, nothing to take away that says - this is what this was all about. You're quite right, almost all of us can probably understand this, but it's such a well covered subject, you'll have to come up with something much more striking. Phil.
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