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Poetry
A Letter Unsent
By CarlHalling
01 April 2007
Adapted (edited, reassembled) from a letter typed to a friend in about 1990, and concerning a series of accidents I suffered at the time, but never finished, and never sent, and recovered only recently, as a piece of scrap paper, a remnant from a long lost past.

Dear...
I haven't been in touch
for a long time.
Sorry.
The last time
I saw you
was in
St. Christopher's Place.
It was a lovely evening...
when I knocked
that chair over.
I am sorry.
Since then,
I've had not
a few accidents
of that kind.
Just three days ago,
I slipped out
in a garden
at a friend's house...
and keeled over,
not once,
not twice,
but three times,
like a log...
clonking my nut
so violently
that people heard me
in the sitting room.
What's more,
I can't remember
a single sentence
spoken
all evening.
The problem is...

Reviews

Written by Phil (6838 comments posted) 1st April 2007
I did say I'd not review your work again, but this appears to be untainted by converstion testimony, so I'll give it go. 
 
I'm not sure this is poetry, I'm not sure where it's going (or where it's come from) but it does have a very beguiling pulse and feel to it. If there's something to understand in there, I'd like to. If it's a string of clever words, I'll feel duped. 
 
Liked it. 
 
Phil.
funnily enough
Written by fellpony (1656 comments posted) 1st April 2007
I think this works. It works even better without the introduction, to be honest Carl. Not memorable in the sense of the words or the metaphors, but very intriguing as a statement of a condition of mind.
Dear Carl
Written by stevetroster (1588 comments posted) 1st April 2007
Having read four of your pieces I must say that they have all been very different, and in some cases quite unique. This one takes the biscuit though! 
It is Surrealism in the style of Kurt Schwitters, and good fun at that. Cut-ups is far from being a new idea, but being the sad git that I am, I have read this piece about ten times trying to work out what the correct order of the passages should be! You may very well have started a new/old trend, and just to annoy Phil I may even have a go at it myself.
Hi Phil
Written by CarlHalling (34 comments posted) 1st April 2007
I appreciate your change of heart. Alot of my earlier pieces don't have the spiritual component. This was written last spring or summer. The spiritual aspect is good for some pieces; but I run the risk of alienating if I overdo it; so will play it down from now on. I'm glad you like the feel of this piece, indeed liked it in general. That's great. I seem to have provoked debate on this piece. I love it! Carl
Re. funnily enough
Written by CarlHalling (34 comments posted) 1st April 2007
Hi Sue, and thanks for your encouragement, and I'm glad you find the piece intriguing. I'm happy to drop the intro if it improves it, no problem...Carl
Thanks, Steve
Written by CarlHalling (34 comments posted) 1st April 2007
I'm so glad you were so intrigued by my writings, delighted in fact. I've always been drawn to the Dada/Surrealist movements and epochs. I look forward to reading your poem in the cut-up style. Carl 

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