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Hearing

By emacskye

01 April 2007

my first hour with hearing aids. let me know what you think

Hearing

“Disgusting, ugly” I said out loud as I pulled my red curls down over my ears. I looked in the mirror again and thought lets just get this over and done with.

I switched them on and walked through the door. Instantly the cotton wool semi silence that had always been there lifted. Would anyone notice? I looked around and it felt like I had never been there before. Staring in awe my heart thumping in my chest and my hands shaking, it was so noisy. I walked through the lab towards my office in a panic.

My footsteps sounded like I was a giant instead of a 4'11" midget. The analysers whirred and everyone was talking over each other, I didn't know what to listen to. I got to my office and closed the door. I could still hear it all but it was muted like I thought sound should be. I sat down, breathing for the first time since I had entered the lab. Alison shouted at me

“Are you ok babe?"

“Yeah, I’m not bad. You?” Alison was about to answer when I freaked.

“What the fuck was that?” I looked around, trying to figure out what the noise was.

“I didn’t hear anything, are you sure you’re ok?” I carried on looking round, what had made that noise and why hadn’t Alison registered it? I was obviously felling self-conscious but now I was paranoid, was I hearing things?

“It was like a squeaky, loud, high pitched ripping sound. Are you sure you heard nothing? There it is again, that sound.” I jumped up looking over at Alison, realisation lighted up her face and she laughed.

“I think that was just my zip.”

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Written by stevetroster (1384 comments posted) 1st April 2007

Not really long enough for me to make any real judgement, so I will now go and read one of your longer pieces. However, I did have a couple of issues with this work.
"I walked through the lab into my office in a panic." This doesn' read at all well, perhaps 'and into my office'? would work. However, not too long afterwards we find that she has just arrived at her office.
"I got to my office and closed the door." Is the story non-linear? So perhaps the first section should read: 'I walked through the lab towards my office'.
This next section needs some punctuation:
"I sat down breathing for the first time since I entered the lab."
I sat down(,) breathing for the first time since I (had)entered the lab.

Best wishes
Steve.

thanks
Written by emacskye (23 comments posted) 1st April 2007

thanks steve, I made the changes and it does read better.

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 1st April 2007

Liked this. Thought it was worth making more of - you could easily have extended it a bit. For me it captured the disorientating feeling of heightened sensitivity well. I remember the first time I wore contact lenses instead of glasses it freaked me out so much I fainted (and I'm not the kind of female who faints all the time!) halfway down the stairs in the opticians and came to on the floor with everyone watching quizzically.

Enjoyed the read

Elli

Written by anorwegianwood (278 comments posted) 1st April 2007

I liked this as well, and agree that you could extend this a bit into something more. It's an interesting topic, and not something most people can understand first-hand, but I thought you did a good job detailing your experience.

~Claire

Written by Phil (5967 comments posted) 1st April 2007

Yep, with Elli and Claire on this. INteresting read but I'm left wanting more - which has to be some measure of success.

Phil.

thanks everyone
Written by emacskye (23 comments posted) 2nd April 2007

Thanks everyone for your comments. Elli I’m glad I’m not the only one who freaks out at heightened sensory experiences. I was thinking about expanding this so thanks for encouraging me to work on it.

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