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Her abundant blonde curls bound together with a black ribbon. She
smiles at me and I look into her sparkling eyes. She's gorgeous as ever
and she knows how to emphasize her natural beauty, never exaggerated,
always just right.
The table wobbles under my elbow, we're
dangerously close to the water. The restaurant's pavement is crowded, a
warm sun shines upon the canal and spring fills the air with a
frivolous, careless atmosphere. Here we are, below street level,
centimeters from the tiny waves created by an empty tour boat. The
scenery is marvelous, but I have eye for a greater beauty.
Her hair
is so light that I always thought her skin to be rather dark, yet it
isn't. It's the wealth of her locks that makes her so exotic and
mysterious. I have known her for years now, but never as much as I
wanted to. What can I ask that I do not know yet? Adventurous and
educated, intelligent and independent...
She tells me about her
latest adventure. She has been hunting for artifacts in Greece. She
tells me about the tiny splinters of stone they found, but doesn't seem
to realize that Helen of Sparta is but a shadow compared to her. Or
does she?
We leave for the cinema, to see how Hollywood portrays those old days. Is it a coincidence that we picked this film?
The hall is crowded and the paths narrow. A man needs to get to his
seat next to us. I lay my hand upon the arm-rest to get up, but to late
I feel her soft hand. The touch is too rough to be gentle, yet she does
not pull her finger away from under my heavy palm.
Afterwards
we go to a pub. I look into her eyes and she looks into mine. I can see
every pretty detail of her face and I wish the evening could last
forever. Did I compare her to Helen of Sparta? She, the girl who adores
myth and archeology? She is second to Aphrodite only, a goddess of
beauty with a mind blessed by Athena. We talk of a thousand things and
I notice she mirrors my own movements. We take another drink and smile
at eachother in the dim light, surrounded by renaissance paintings
depicting myth and legend.
Then at last we have to go home. We
walk to her bicycle and wait. Now is the moment, I know. In a film I
would lean forward and kiss her gently on her lips. But this is not a
film. I once, years ago, told her how I fancied her and the answer was
sweet and laconic, but clear... I dare not touch her. We look at
eachother, expectingly. Perhaps it is my own mind which painted this
cinematic picture. Perhaps she's just a friend waiting for a swift
goodbye. Yet perhaps there is a spark that lightened a greater fire?
I do not know and wish her goodnight from a distance. Then we go our
own way and I walk towards the train with a smile upon my face... |
Written by Signa (66 comments posted) 2nd April 2007 | Awww no - this brought a tear to my eye! Is this really non-fiction - why did you not kiss her? What's the worst that could have happened? Without knowing her side of the story it's impossible to know whether or not you made the cinematic picture in your head or whether it was really romantic. That's what was so fascinating. I read it several times trying to pick up on any clues to what she was thinking but I couldn't be sure. Except you were smiling at the end - did I miss something there? You also put an extra h in "wish" and I didn't understand the "spark that lightened a greater fire" What happened next? Did she call you? | Written by Signa (66 comments posted) 2nd April 2007 | I forgot to say I liked it a lot! | Written by Fledermaus (3159 comments posted) 2nd April 2007 | Thank you Signa, This is realy non-fiction. I was realy in doubt. I wanted to kiss her, but then, I didn't want to spoil a friendship if I was wrong. A bit cowardish perhaps, but she did reject me once in a very cute way and I was affraid a possible second time wouldn't be so cute. I have no clue what she thinks of me realy. I'll remove the typos  | Written by Phil (6383 comments posted) 2nd April 2007 | Hi Fledermaus. I really liked this. You built up to the moment very well and kept us all guessing until the end. What if......what if..... Phil | Written by anorwegianwood (278 comments posted) 2nd April 2007 | Yeah, I've been there, once on each side of the situation. Ah well. I liked this, too. An old theme, yet not at all cliched the way you've written it. | Hi Fledermaus Written by jean.day (2190 comments posted) 3rd April 2007 | | In Amsterdam was it - after you painted the picture of being there a few posts ago? It was a good read - and we were all rooting for you. You did say you were going to share some of your stories of the women in your life - so maybe this is just the start. Good luck. | Written by Fledermaus (3159 comments posted) 3rd April 2007 | Thanks Phil, Claire and Jean. Phil: I'm still guessing too Hopefully there's ll be another historical/superhero film soon, so I have an excuse to ask her out. Claire: On each side of the situation? I hope she's a little disappointed I didn't kiss her too Couring seems to be a complicated art, even harder than poetry. Jean: It was in Utrecht. There the canals are deeper below street-level, so that the basements (called 'werfkelders') are on one side below the ground and on the other side they are an extra floor. The street is actually on top of these basements. They used to be storehouses, but nowadays they are mainly restaurants. They use the quays as their pavement, so when you're sitting there you can see the bicycles above you and the boats next to you | Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 3rd April 2007 | I think this is lovely! You know what you should do? Invite her over some time and leave this lying where she can see it. Write her name on it and half cover it with a book, perhaps. You don't have to show it to her directly, but put it where she can find it. That way, if she doesn't fancy you, she'll still be flattered, but not feel oppressed by your attentions. I've been there too, like Claire, on both sides. It isn't fun. I used to pass Utrecht on the train, on my way from Amsterdam to s'Hertogenbosch. . . | Written by Fledermaus (3159 comments posted) 4th April 2007 | Thanks Witzl. Sounds like a great idea, but unfortunately it won't work (yet). Wouldn't it be great if she some way by accident would come accross this site? Little chance of that either I'm affraid, but it'd be a nice though. Thanks for the tip  | Written by Gill21 (566 comments posted) 5th April 2007 | What a wonderful little piece. I so wanted something to happen and they way you spoke about her, made her seem mysterious and wonderful. The setting was described as though it was a scene in a film. I loved how you walked her back to her bike. 'The table wobbles under my elbow, we're dangerously close to the water' - sums it all up. Will they fall? Won't they?? A lovely read :-) | Written by Fledermaus (3159 comments posted) 10th April 2007 | Thanks Gill. Looking back I think it's a pity I didn't try. I don't see her all that often already, so like Signa said, "what's the worst that could have happened?" Yet falling in love is still a lot better than falling into the canal | Go on Written by AnnieSeed (128 comments posted) 11th May 2007 | It's a lovely piece, Fledermaus, you really brought the scenes alive and made it very real for us. Could it really hurt if you just asked her if she still feels the same as she did before? It seems to me that love is more about trust and friendship built on years of good friendship than about teenage infatuation, so maybe she does feel more now than she did then - or maybe she wasn't sure then. Good luck anyway. AnnieSeed | Written by Fledermaus (3159 comments posted) 11th May 2007 | Thanks Annie. Sadly enough, I am incredibly clumsy where women are concerned. It seems I have absolutely no idea whether someone fancies me or not... Result: A lot of female friends, but no GF  |
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