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White Room (Doorway 1: 2nd Exit)
By ellipinnock
04 April 2007
Idle doodling in response to the earlier challenge...Going to go and do some work now!

I breathe in deeply; the air has a slight scent that I can just pick out. A taint amidst the overwhelming sensory battery of null space. I start to unravel the white light, one colour at a time; start to filter out the white noise, frequency by frequency. It is not a perfect technique, after half an hour there is still a flickering in my vision and a hum in my ears but I can function; can see and hear beyond myself.

The effort has exhausted me, muscles quiver - oxygen starved; I am dripping with sweat and a sharp pain is beating its way through from the back of my skull. I fold over onto the featureless floor and lie there, panting. Slowly, my heart rate falls and sensations return.

I can just make out two doors in front of me, as white and featureless as the floor I am lying on. I know that one of them leads back into my apartment. I know too that there are guards with guns somewhere but I cannot remember where. I must be careful to avoid them.

I twist and wriggle until one of the doors comes close, into my field of vision. I can just see blue light underneath it, dissipating as it hits the white expanse surrounding me. I can smell the faint acrid taint from earlier, seeming to emanate from the other side of this door.

My decision made, I drag myself up the door frame, lights exploding in my skull with the effort, clouding my vision for a short while. Slapping my wrist against the scanner I fall through the door and hit the floor on the other side. The door begins to close and, knowing it will not stop for me, I wrench my feet out of the opening, leaving a shoe behind to jam the mechanism.

The meter begins to bleep an alarm but I ignore it, focussing instead on my surroundings. I can see very little, the blue light I had seen under the door engulfs this place completely in thick, fog-like swathes. Arms out in front of me, I stumble forwards into the blueness, feeling for anything concrete.

The floor feels smooth at first, becoming rougher as I walk further away from the door. Rough enough to turn an ankle on. As the blue swirls around me, deepening in colour, obscuring my view until I can hardly see, I sink to my knees.

I begin to crawl, slowly, realising I now have no idea where the white door is, the blue gloom obscuring everything. Suddenly I come across a pool where blue light mingles with white, lifting the gloom a little. A big space; I cannot see where the dense blue begins again.

In the distance I can make out a group of dense structures, glowing faintly purple. I sit on the edge of the clearing and watch them pulse slowly in patterns that seem to swirl and change yet remain somehow constant, unchanging to the casual eye. As I watch the pulsing seems to quicken and I can, I think, make out flashes of orange threading through the pattern. The orange draws me in as if it is coming closer to me, slowly, second by second. But when I look down at my feet, it is I who am moving, inexorably, towards it.

Reviews
Fantastic!
Written by stevetroster (1549 comments posted) 4th April 2007
Flows beautifully from the first section, and you have introduced some coulour! We may have to change the title now! Wonder who will be the third leg of our relay team? 
Some lovely narrative, this being my favourie: 
"I start to unravel the white light, one colour at a time"

Written by Lizzy (793 comments posted) 5th April 2007
I don't usually read sci fi but this was very good. 
I liked its build up and it was very poetic. 
I hope there is going to be a follow up i want to know what the orange light is. 
Lizzy

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