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Resident Alien: Making a Move
By Witzl
05 April 2007
The next installment. Please give me your honest feedback.

   “You will get sick of it, Mary.  Just wait and see.”

   “I’ll bet I won’t.”

   “Well, I will ask you again in two months and see how you feel then!”

   “Go right ahead, but I’ll bet you anything I won’t have changed my mind.”

   Toyoda-san smiled and shook her head. She was positive I’d soon have my fill of rain.

   People say that Japan has five seasons, the fifth one being the rainy season. Coming from a desert town in Southern California where rain was something of a novelty, I felt that it could hardly rain enough for me. Every time I mentioned this in Japan, people laughed and told me to say that again in early August, when I’d had more than a month of the rainy season. Then I’d be singing another song.

   Rain pelted down, I was told, with a certain particular sound, the zaa zaa zaaa that Antonio and others found so depressing. The sky took on a grey cast; you might have one day of mild sun alternating with another of constant rain, but you got weeks of this, and the sunny days were never enough to dry up all the moisture. After a week or two, your house began to reek of damp. Mold grew on your ceilings and in your genkan. Your shoes turned green with it, your laundry soured and stank and could not be hung out to dry.  All of that might have depressed me if I hadn’t grown up in a hot and dusty Southern California town where water wasn’t something you took for granted. Although I had the sense not to tell too many people this, the truth was, I could hardly wait for my first rainy season. As it happened, though, my first year in Japan was a fluke: the driest rainy season in over sixty years.

   Comparatively dry though it was, it still rained enough that getting my laundry done became a problem. Until I met Antonio, I’d had a lot of time during the day. Even if it rained a lot, I could hang my laundry out to dry on sunny days and manage to keep up with it. Once I met Antonio, however, I could no longer do this: I was spending the sunny days with him.  Of course, this had its compensations.

   I was almost deliriously happy. No longer did I spend almost all of my evenings at home, communing with my radio and listening to the Far East Network – I had a boyfriend. Although I would have been happy enough just spending time with him, Antonio was good at thinking up fun and different things to do. On clear days, we flew kites on the beach in Kamakura or went on hikes; on rainy days, we visited temples, shrines and museums. Antonio’s neighborhood was full of interesting surprises:  there was a mosque just around the corner from the house where he was living, for instance, and a café where they served wonderful pastries and espresso. Antonio knew Tokyo and Yokohama very well.  I know a really good Turkish restaurant a few blocks from here, he might say when we were coming back from visiting a museum or seeing a movie. And we would get off the train and he would be able to find the restaurant. He knew of little hole-in-the-wall jazz clubs and bistros where you could hear flamenco music, Vietnamese restaurants and outdoor sculpture gardens.  And he had dozens of friends and acquaintances, too: a French couple he’d met in Yokohama, a Japanese singer who wanted to learn a song in Catalan, friends from Madrid who were living and working in Tokyo, fellow architecture students who were Chinese, Brazillian, African.  In the space of a few weeks, my circle of acquaintances in Japan quadrupled. Saturday and Sunday were days to look forward to – and the nights were right off the charts.

   I suddenly saw just how reclusive and uninteresting my life in Yokohama had been up to this point.  Work, school, home and housework – that was all I ever did apart from listening to the radio.  Well, things certainly had changed.

   At work, Todd was every bit as obnoxious as usual, but I found that I hardly cared – especially when I was back in Yokohama after spending a weekend with Antonio. And with the weekends to look forward to now, the weekdays fairly flew by.  I even started going out to eat with Caroline and our male colleagues on a fairly regular basis – something that would have been unheard of when Marjorie was still around.

   “You look different,” said Toyoda-san, eyeing me shrewdly. “Really happy,” added Yagi-san tilting her head and narrowing her eyes.  I smiled, but shrugged. I wasn’t sure where my relationship with Antonio was going, so I felt superstitious about telling everyone about him just yet. Keeping it to myself wasn’t easy, but I did a pretty good job.

   Before the rainy season was over, Antonio had left for Spain and I was once again without a boyfriend. I’d known that he would be leaving, but it still came as a shock. Suddenly I realized just how isolated my apartment was, and how inconveniently located it was for getting to Tokyo.  Just getting to Yokohama Central Station took me the better part of half an hour. Getting to Tokyo from there took another forty-five minutes, excluding waiting time. If most of my friends had been in Yokohama, this wouldn’t have been much of a problem. But when I considered that all of my friends lived in Tokyo, it struck me that my apartment was hardly conducive to any kind of social life. I’d been in Konandai almost nine months and in all that time, I’d only had two or three friends come to visit me there. It took my friends from Tokyo as much time to get to my apartment as it did for me to get to theirs, and as there was absolutely nothing interesting to see or do in my neighborhood, it made much more sense for me to visit them in Tokyo. My apartment was a place where I slept and bathed – and listened to the radio.  The more I thought about it, the more I realized that I needed to do something about this. I needed to move.

   “Well, okay, if you think you really have to,” said Toyoda-san. “But the school can’t help you do it, so you’ll have to make the arrangements yourself.”  I knew that this was how it had to be. Moving was my problem, after all; it wasn’t as if there was anything wrong with my apartment, it was just that it was inconvenient.

   “Take my advice,” said Toyoda-san, “and go for a cheap place. If you go for a nice place you’ll have to spend a lot of money.”

   This was true. Moving is a major headache in Japan, and one of the worst things about it is the money you are obliged to spend on various deposits and real estate agent fees. First there is the security deposit, or shikikin which is paid to your landlord. This can be as little as one month’s rent and as much as six months’; in theory, you are supposed to get your shikikin back when you leave, but in practice some of it is occasionally deducted. Then there is the reikin, literally ‘gift money,’ also referred to as ‘key money,’ which again is paid to your landlord. This is non-refundable, though sometimes negotiable, and again, the amount varies from one month’s rent to six months’ worth. Finally, there is the real estate agent’s fee, which is usually one month’s rent, but can be higher. The nicer the apartment, the higher your shikikin and reikin and agent’s fee will be, and of course the higher your rent, so if you move into a relatively expensive place, you end up paying a whopping great sum – sometimes over six months’ worth –all in one go. I was anxious to avoid doing this.

   After studying the notices pasted in the windows, I found a real estate agent close to Yokohama Station that didn’t look too fancy, and taking a deep breath, went inside. Two middle-aged men in ill-fitting blue suits looked up at me through a fog of cigarette smoke.

   “Can’t speak English,” said the oldest one, taking a deep pull on his cigarette.

   “Japanese speak,” said the next to the oldest, in heavily accented English. “Only Japanese speak.”

   I shook my head, trying not to cough. “That’s okay, I speak Japanese.”  After all, I might not be exactly fluent, but I could certainly do better grammar-wise than Only Japanese speak.

   “What do you want?” asked the older man again.

   “I’m looking for an apartment,” I told him, watching with dismay as he crushed out one cigarette and lit another.

   “Heh. An apartment. You live here in Japan? Just arrive?”

   To give them credit, once I explained the situation, they heard me out – and they rose to the challenge of finding me exactly what I was looking for.

   “Gotta be cheap, right?” said the younger of the two men. He had been given the job of finding me a place. He was probably just cutting his teeth in the real estate world; the older man must have thought that I wasn’t a lucrative enough job to warrant his greater expertise.

   “Right. Cheap – that’s the main thing.”

   “But far from station is okay, yeah?”

   “Yes. I don’t mind walking.”  I especially didn’t mind walking when the apartments that were close to the station tended to be a lot pricier than the ones that were further away.

   “Okay if it is a student place?”

   “Absolutely.”  Why not? I would be commuting at least twice a week to my Japanese language school in Tokyo, after all.

   The man frowned, and thumbed through a large book. He wrote down a few addresses and made some phone calls. I could not understand all of what he was saying, but the term gaijin came up many times. Finally, fortifying himself with another cigarette, he stood up. “Okay. Let’s go.”

   The first place we saw was so isolated that even the agent himself could not conceal  his surprise. And there was no way of ignoring the fact that it was a stone’s throw from an electric sub-station. “Hmm,” he said, “rent is very cheap, but this place is maybe not so good.”   I had to agree.

   The second apartment was on the ground floor, next to a men’s university where martial arts seemed to be the main focus. I had visions of my undergarments molding over as I pegged them to a line strung up inside my apartment, despite the fact that there was a clothesline in the veranda – a washing line within spitting distance of a men’s university was just asking for trouble. The kitchen was filthy, and the bathroom was worse. The agent took the kitchen very much in his stride, but wrinkled his nose at the state of the bathroom. “Maybe not so good for a young lady,” he admitted, as we watched a rowdy group of boys stroll past. My heart sank. Were they all going to be this awful?

   The third apartment wasn’t really an apartment, it was a room in a women’s boarding house. The building was older than the first two, a two-story structure that must have dated back to the Taisho period. It was only ten minutes from the station, in a pleasantly shabby residential neighborhood, and surrounded by shade trees. The lobby downstairs was all dark, old wood, obviously riddled by woodworm. There were cubby-holes for all the residents’ shoes, and a narrow wooden staircase led to half a dozen rooms upstairs.

   The room itself was tiny, only 4.5 tatami mats, or fifteen square meters, with a kitchen you could cross in one stride. There was a refrigerator-sized dent in one corner of the tatami room, as the kitchen was obviously too small to accommodate one. There were two other problems: the toilet was shared with half a dozen other women, and there was no bath.

   “What do you think?” asked the agent.

   The truth was, I was enchanted. But no bathroom! “What would I do about a bath?”

   He looked at his notes. “Public bath is less than three minutes away.”

   I’d heard about public baths. One of my friends in Tokyo lived in an apartment without a bathroom and had been using his neighborhood bath on a regular basis. It wasn’t particularly expensive – about the price of a good cup of coffee – and he claimed that he hardly minded it at all. And the best thing about it, he insisted, was that he no longer had to clean the bathroom every week.

   “How much did you say the rent was again?”

   “Thirty thousand yen.”  That was less than half the rent I was currently paying.

   “Would you give me a minute to think it over, please?”

   “Certainly.”

   I went to inspect the toilet, which was right next-door to my room. It was a rather old squat-style affair, but reasonably clean. I went back into the room and looked out the window and saw nothing but tree branches. Suddenly a fresh breeze stirred the leaves and a bird burst into song.

   “Okay. I’ll take it.”

 

Reviews
Hi Mary
Written by jean.day (2368 comments posted) 5th April 2007
This was an interesting chapter - telling about your wild romantic life with Antonio. Did he keep in contact with you after he left? Did he intend coming back? 
 
And the apartment shopping was fun to hear about too.  
I somehow don't think it will be all that good - but will have to wait for the next chapter or so to find out.

Written by spinynorman (6 comments posted) 5th April 2007
Hello, thanks for the welcome and advice which I'm taking 
At first I thought this was some sort of retrospective blog but after checking I saw it was part of a memoir.  
At first I thought I was going to struggle to get through it as it seemed too personal and I did not know the people mentioned, however the information about the rain and the moving and estate agents was so fascinating that I just had to keep reading. I'll have to read back to make sense of it all.
Did Miss it?
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3569 comments posted) 5th April 2007
Jean was mentioning, telling about your wild romance. I seemed to be reading about rain and estate agents. I must have missed the wild romance somehow. OK I'm being unfair you did talk about meals and socialising. I suppose we just have different definitions of wild romance. I think this is one of the best chapters, its right up there with bitchy sue and the cockroach etc. I'll just say this if you can make house-hunting and estate agents an interesting topic for reading then the lierary world is yours for the taking. It's just so easy to empathise with all of this. I really can't think of much to criticise 
cheers 
J

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 5th April 2007
Thank you, Jean, Spinynorman, and Jane. I really appreciate your comments on this and the fact that you are following it. 
 
Jean, there is more of Antonio to come -- he did come back; he still had buildings to design (sadly, it wasn't just me that he came back for). 
 
Spinynorman, thank you for getting throught his even when you didn't know what the context was. I really should have this in the Extended Works section, but since it is non-fiction, I've been posting it here.  
 
Jane, this is short on wild romance, but there is more of that to come -- after a fashion. Oh, if I could but tell all, I'd have quite a tale to tell -- but telling all is just too much for me, I'm afraid.
Wow
Written by Katsinella (28 comments posted) 5th April 2007
This is a great read. I should have ventured from short stories before. I see that this is part of an ongoing series so I will go back and read the others. 
I have a personal fascination with Japan which is a definite hook for this work. Your style is light and easy to read.

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 6th April 2007
Thank you, Katsinella. I ought to go and clean up the other Resident Alien files; much of the writing is redundant, and though I have changed it on my own copy of this, I have left the entries as they stand on GW. Sorry for the confusion -- just skim through it quickly or wait and I will resubmit a clean copy!

Written by Phil (6963 comments posted) 6th April 2007
As ever good stuff Mary. I like the way this references back to earlier scenes - Antonio, the underwear thief, Todd.  
 
Nothing to crit. - sorry. 
 
Still think you're on a winner. 
 
Phil

Written by spinynorman (6 comments posted) 7th April 2007
I have read some other posts of this and now see what you are doing. A series of tales recounting your experiences in Japan. It all makes much more sense now.  
This is not my favoured genre but these pieces are not in the traditional style.You are not trying to mock or send up the other culture, as is common with certain authors, but you have a genuine fascination and love of the country, which you want to share. The little vignettes give us an insight into the underbelly of a people and culture, small stories with a big heart. 
I am enjoying them but fear your lack of celebrity status may hamper your goal of publication- that is an observation not a criticism.You have a style that demands attention which should help.

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 7th April 2007
Thank you for your comments, Phil and spinynorman.  
 
It seems more and more unlikely that I am ever going to get this published; at this point I almost think I am doing it for the nostalgia factor and perhaps also as a writing exercise. Still, I am contacting agents about this; hope springs eternal.  
 
It is true that memoirs generally sell only when they are written by celebrities. If I were a famous athlete, I would almost certainly be able to flog this. But, while I like fiction more than non-fiction, two of my favorite books happen to be memoirs of people who aren't tremendously famous, Sheila Payne's The Afghan Amulet and Mark Salzman's Iron and Silk. Both of those books involve a person on a quest in a foreign country, and I suppose I had something like that in mind when I first started this series.  
 
Japan is the easiest country in the world to mock, and maybe that is why I can't stand it when people do this. I lived there for a long time and have often felt that the trick is writing about Japan in a way that is neither obsequiously flattering nor mocking, so I am glad that you appreciated this, spinynorman.

Written by Clifftown (642 comments posted) 17th April 2007
Wonderful piece, as usual. I really do get lost in your writing, and this, as Jane says, is up there with the best of them. I felt as though I were there when you were describing the apartment and look forward to seeing how it all turned out. I'm with Jean in wanting to know more about your romance with Antonio - but that's because you've described him and the whole situation so well, it's like wanting to know what's happened to old friends! 
 
Off to catch up with the rest now...

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 17th April 2007
Thank you for your kind words, Nina. I'm still persevering with this and only have a short way to go before I've covered my first year in Japan. After that, I plan to give this a break, but in the meantime I really do appreciate you following this!  
VERY INTERESTING ...
Written by bluecity (432 comments posted) 1st August 2007
Mary, this is my first review for GW, so I hope it's along the lines of what you require. 
 
Your English-style was flawless - you would be a sub-editor's dream! 
 
I particularly liked your opening. I picked your article because it was the top of the list on the side-frame and I was prepared to move on after a few lines if what I was reading didn't grab me, but your chatty opening did keep my attention. Your ending too was very conclusive too - it really ended, leaving nothing more to say on the matter. 
 
Your account of life in Japan was, as someone else above, said, a bit like a blog, but nonetheless interesting for all that. Your account gave us an excellent perspective into contemporary life in Japan. If a novelist (like me) wanted to write about a character living in Japan, he/she could definitely use your work as a valuable resource. 
 
How are you going to go about selling this? Is this really a resource which you will draw upon to produce travel articles for the press in the US?

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 1st August 2007
Hello, bluecity. Welcome to GW, and thank you for your kind words. I hope to be able to read your work too. 
 
This is part of a long memoir I have been writing, which I am calling 'Resident Alien.' Absolutely no one in the publishing world has shown a flicker of interest in it, either in the U.S. or the U.K., though one agent who is currently reading a young adult novel of mine has said he found it 'very interesting' and another has described it as 'charming, but not for me.'  
 
The fact that you and others on GW have commented encouragingly on this really cheers me up and makes me want to keep at it. For what it is worth, I am writing a blog, which I also call 'Resident Alien,' shamelessly hoping to garner some interest in my memoir: 
 
http://witzl.blogspot.com/

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