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The Tiny Wee Persian Mosquito
By Talisker
05 April 2007
Gentle (yet biting) political satire

The Tiny Wee Persian Mosquito

A tiny wee Persian mosquito

flew over the Shat-al-Arab       

singing “Meester, vood eet no be sweet, oh

To geev Tony Blairo a jab? Heehee!

To geev Meester Blairo a jab!”


So this tiny wee Persian mosquito

got together with one or two friends

“eef vee can just geto sam Breeteesh or NATO

and zay hav no neto, descend! Heehee!

Eff zay have no neto, decend!”


Now the tiny wee Persian mosquito

soon spied pale pink flesh in a boat

crying “look eets a dinghy! They’ll soon feel my stingy,

should vee go for zee thingy or throat? Heehee!

I think vee shall go for zee throat (zee thingy may be stinky, no?)


They sooked and the sooked till they puked

And when  their wee bellies were bloated

And each squadron member’d partooked

Their leader was verily quoted;

“zees meeshon voz pure copybook,

Heehee! Zees meeshon voz pure copybook”


Oli 05/04/07

Reviews

Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 5th April 2007
This reads like it ought to be sung, but I can't place it to a tune. Odd mix of accents, Scots and faux Iranian. 
 
Don't know what to make of the whole issue myself. 
 
Fun piece. 
 
Phil.

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 5th April 2007
I know there's a tune this goes to -- absolutely! And it has to be Gilbert & Sullivan, too.  
 
Liked the 'pale pink flesh in a boat' -- nice image!
Chunes to fit
Written by patterjack (1193 comments posted) 5th April 2007
Many a one can be found in the old Oz (inherited )songs like Bound for Botany Bay or better The Dying Stockman ( the latter must originally have been Pom , as Louis Macneice parodied it in one of his radio plays). 
 
The wife claims it will fit , as far as time goes , to 4/4 time  
 
Covers a lot of ground that does ! and ground well out of my territory ! 
 
patterjack 
 
Never mind the music
Written by Josie (2785 comments posted) 7th April 2007
The poem made me laugh. heehee Well done Oli and thanks for the laugh heehee

Written by coosh (863 comments posted) 11th April 2007
Delightful, upbeat, sing-songy feel to this - can almost see it set to a cartoon. And beautifully simple. Cheers.

Written by Fledermaus (3281 comments posted) 11th April 2007
Funny piece ;) And a nice satire, for I think the mosquito metaphor is a good one.

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