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By patterjack
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09 April 2007 |
On my 78th birthday
An Ed-dy of Thoughts
As I looked at my toes at the end of the bed A small voice whispered in my mind and said : Go on , just wiggle them and see if you're dead !
I had to deny it its wish -- for that bred too much of a doubt in the back of my head whence all optimism had already fled.
So I look to the future with a trifle of dread while I consider my tenuous grip on life's thread .
Since 78 years have already sped there isn't much left of life's path to tread ! |
Written by Phil (6963 comments posted) 9th April 2007 | Well first off, a very happy birthday Brian. There's no cake smilie, so you can have this one: 
All the best (actually, some of the worst too - the two of us excluded) were born in April. I'm forty in a few days.
Really liked the tone of the first verse, but I read it as getting more serious from then on. Enjoyed the piece anyway.
On a philosophical note - and I made this up all on my own: there's always another corner to turn on life's path, none of us know where the dead-end will be, we can just keep walking.
Here's to many more corners. Cheers.
Phil. | Cpongratulations Brian
Written by Josie (2847 comments posted) 9th April 2007 | | And may you just forget numbers and looking at yourself in the looking glass, and looking at your toes. To someone of 100, you are but a spring chicken. I thought your poem very funny and enjoyed a little smile. |
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3569 comments posted) 9th April 2007 | How else would a poet celebrate his birthday? I can understand you taking a moment to reflect, but back in the here and now is where you belong and the trick is to keep on living.
The past is a cancelled cheque, the future and IOU, the only currency we have is today., a cliche?-yes; true? definitely
I'll say more in a PM
cheers
Jane | Hi Brian
Written by jean.day (2369 comments posted) 10th April 2007 | | Good poem. Happy Birthday. | Enjoyed it. Happy Birthday!
Written by wltshr (352 comments posted) 10th April 2007 | I loved the first verse.
I just wonder! If you started with the first verse and, ignoring birthdays, built a different poem from there; I just wonder where it might end up and how powerful it might be.
Wltshr | many thanks
Written by patterjack (1435 comments posted) 10th April 2007 | And best wishes Phil for the upcoming !!!
Josie --the verse is not good but -- please !!! cPongratulations !!!!!!
I like the cliche Jane -- doing my best with the here and now and looking forward as well -- to the pm or an email
Jean -- glad you liked it -- but honest -- it is closer to tricksy verse than poetry.
Wiltshr -- nope , just pinched the idea of the toe wiggling from somewhere or other -- that had been a slightly melancholic remark too , as I remember , and the rest just echoed it
Thanks again all -- roll on to 2008 ! |
Written by Talisker (1331 comments posted) 11th April 2007 | Belated best wishes Brian - been busy in my new role as a checkout assistant at the local supermarket.
The fact that you can still see the toes at the end of your bed says something for your eyesight. Never mind the wiggle - so long as there is no name tag thereon, you should be ok
May you have very many happy returns of the day and as we Scots say "lang may yer lum reek"
Oli |
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