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crap squirrel

Written by fellpony

10 April 2007

"I wandered lonely along as if I was a cloud/

That floats on high over vales and hills/

When all at once I looked down and saw a crowd/

And in my path there was a host of golden daffodils so check it."

http://news.sky.com/skynews/article/0,,30000-1259949,00.html

Old Willy Wordsworth walked the hills

and as he walked he spoke aloud.

He may have practised dreadful verse;

he recollected daffodils.

When wandering in that lonely state,

his neighbours thought the poet strange -

he probably was drunk, or worse

addicted to an opiate.

But nothing's stranger than a rap

that fractures Willy's measured lines

and casts a squirrel to converse.

The only word that rhymes is crap.

Reviews

Written by Phil (6713 comments posted) 10th April 2007

Followed the link and I'm with you on this one. Old Willy W was a boring old fart, but he could string his words together. That squirrel - utter crap.

Phil

Written by Witzl (1585 comments posted) 11th April 2007

How dare they?

What next, T. S. Eliot with garden gnomes?

Written by fellpony (1608 comments posted) 11th April 2007

I heard the whole piece on the radio this morning - what annoys me about rap is not that it's rhythmic, but that the rhythm is not based on the words. They are secondary to the beat of the music behind them. What a waste.

I still think it's rubbish.

Written by ellipinnock (1753 comments posted) 17th April 2007

Thought I commented on this when I read it - clearly I was having a senile moment. What I would have said, had I said it, would be that I agree with you 100% and liked this very much.

Elli

Smile on
Written by andybyers (171 comments posted) 1st August 2007

I found this a delight to read. It’s a form I hadn’t seen before. It’s very lyrical; the meter is precision-jeweled (something I adore in poetry far more than slavish rhyming schemes) and the imagery is gentle and rolling; it’s like a couple of stiff drinks all by itself. Nicely done… I wish they had some means of favouriting works here… do they?

form
Written by fellpony (1608 comments posted) 1st August 2007

frequently I do use a traditional form of some kind to help me shape my poems, but this one is something that (I think) I made up! Probably someone will now prove me wrong and say it's the GooglySquat sonnet or something of that nature.

We did try a star system for favourite works, for a while, but it had its problems and nascent removed it for the time being. As for making works your own favourites, no, I don't think we've got anything set up, so you'd have to put it into your browser favourites, I suppose.

Thanks for the comments! very kind!

Written by owl_light (20 comments posted) 2nd September 2008

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VXbrSALG684

Have a groovy squirrel called Mr McNuts

If only
Written by owl_light (20 comments posted) 2nd September 2008

If you can keep yo stash when the bros
Are losing theirs and pinning it on you.
If you can bust yo rival crew
And make da cash and sniff da glue,
If you can be dissed and use da knife
And do da time and feel da strife.
And through it all, through all dem fights,
Hang on man, to dem yo human rights.
If you can rap wid da gangsta boys
And rap some wid da law
If you can keep dem guessing
About just what dey saw
If you can keep dem guessing
About just what dey know
And so hold when dere is nothing
Except the will dat shouts 'Let's Go'.
If you can talk to magistrates and hang on to your crack ,
Or social workers, who know yo pain
So let you keep yo smack
If you can do all dat yo should
Do what da broverhood have done
Then yours is the turf.
And there's truth in the lie:
That yo a man, my son.

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