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| By no1butClo | ||||||||||||
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I feel like I've just done the same thing twice. Anyone who's read 'Eurydice II', please tell me if my hunch is correct. It would be so nice to find out I'm just being paranoid... - do you think I should cut it down? - is the title totally irrelevant? - will someone pedantic PLEASE correct my punctuation mistakes, 'cause I can't proof-read for toffee =) oh, and you may find it makes no sense =) Reviews welcome as always, and a belated Happy Easter, Joyeux Paques, or appropriate equivalent. Five years ago, I was thinking like a kid, and you were thinking like I am now, letting instinct guide what reason couldn't judge. Twelve months ago, you were pushing for an answer; I was scared, and far too stubborn to reply. I kept you guessing, made you think and pushed you back behind the curtain you had opened for a moment. Ten minutes ago, I understood why you were frightened, by the way I made my contradictions plain. And now I watch your eyes as you are telling me a secret, flicking back through pages of the past I've never seen. I can tell, between the kisses, you've been listening to my breathing, holding yours and leaving me to search the air for what I can't tease out of you. Through my guesswork, you can feel me losing poise, and concentration. 'cause the scent of you catches in my ribcage. Your words grow fingers, that slide over skin, beneath a tight-fit shirt, and through holes that my soul forgot to mention. And we taste each other's lips like wine, sampling this alchemy of bated breath, and whispered words.
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