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The World of Cats version 2

By John_O

13 April 2007

This is a bit like a nursery rhyme, but very repetitive, its written for young kids.
It takes the form of a 'conversation' between the narrator and the cats, so get your funny voices ready when reading it aloud.
It would probably work best with illustrations but you will just have to use your imaginations for now....

With thanks to Fellpony for pointing out the need for an ending, I hope this one do.

The World of Cats

Cats are our furry friends. Cats sit in our laps.
Cats eat, cats leap, cats play, cats sleep.
Cats go out of doors.

What do cats do when they go out of doors ?
I will tell you what they do.
They walk softly on silent paws.
Softly through hedges, silently past doors.
Looking.
What are cats looking for ?

Who knows what cats are looking for ?
Why a cat of course.
This is Cosmos. Cosmos the wise, Cosmos the white, Cosmos the cat.
Cosmos the wise white cat, he knows what cats are looking for.

“I am Cosmos. Listen to what I say.
Cats are looking for beetles and bugs.”
Beetles and bugs. Are you sure ?

“Beetles and bugs are what cats are looking for.
Beetles that rush and run to and fro.
Bugs that creep and crawl from dusk to dawn.
Beetles and bugs are what cats are looking for.”

Cats are our furry friends. Cats sit in our laps.
Cats eat, cats leap, cats play, cats sleep.
Cats go out of doors.

What do cats do when they go out of doors ?
I will tell you what they do.
They walk softly on silent paws.
Softly through hedges, silently past doors.
Sniffing.
What are cats sniffing for ?

Who knows what cats are sniffing for ?
Why a cat of course.
This is Marmalade. Marmalade the lazy, Marmalade the fat, Marmalade the cat.
Marmalade the lazy fat cat, he knows what cats are sniffing for.

“I am Marmalade. Listen to what I say.
Cats are sniffing for birds and mice.”
Birds and mice. Are you sure ?

“Birds and mice are what cats are sniffing for.
Birds that hop and flap about in a bush.
Mice that squeak and scrabble from dawn to dusk
Birds and mice are what cats are sniffing for.”

Cats are our furry friends. Cats sit in our laps.
Cats eat, cats leap, cats play, cats sleep.
Cats go out of doors.

What do cats do when they go out of doors ?
I will tell you what they do.
They walk softly on silent paws.
Softly through hedges, silently past doors.
Listening.
What are cats listening for ?

Who knows what cats are listening for ?
Why a cat of course.
This is Siam. Siam the swift, Siam the grey, Siam the cat.
Siam the swift grey cat, he knows what cats are listening for.

“I am Siam. Listen to what I say.
Cats are listening for dogs and frogs.”
Dogs and frogs. Are you sure ?
“Dogs and frogs are what cats are listening for.
Dogs that bark and growl as they run.
Frogs that croak and call from dusk to dawn.
Dogs and frogs are what cats are listening for.”

Cats are our furry friends. Cats sit in our laps.
Cats eat, cats leap, cats play, cats sleep.
Cats go out of doors.

But what do cats love best of all ?
Who knows what cats love best of all ?
Why a cat of course.
This is Smokey. Smokey the cuddly, Smokey the black, Smokey the cat.
Smokey the cuddly black cat, she knows what cats love best of all.

“ I am Smokey. Listen to what I say.
Cats love you best of all.”

Reviews

Written by Gill21 (566 comments posted) 13th April 2007

What fun! I really loved this and is something my inner child very much enjoyed also. Nothing negative to say about it at all

Written by TomtomKent (33 comments posted) 13th April 2007

As a bonafide "Cat Person" (dogs are too scary, I liked that poem.

Just promise me that if Andrew Lloyd Webber ever tries to ruin it with bad costumes and worse music you will ask for a VERY big cheque? (Kidding!)

I wanted to offer some constructive criticism, but I can't think of any, so here is a suggestion, contact some publishers and try to pitch it as a picture book. I think that with a few stanzas on each page, and some illustrations of Marmalade, Cosmos and Siam imparting their wisdom it could make a lovely bed time story.

Hi there cat people
Written by John_O (151 comments posted) 13th April 2007

Many thanks for recording your appreciation of the verse, I wonder if anyone will actually read it to their youngsters and report back....
When I wrote it I didn't think of it as a very long piece, but your comment (TTK) about a publisher made me look at it again, it is indeed as long as many junior readers I've come across. I have some thoughts about getting it illustrated before approaching an agent or publisher as I think that even if they don't go with the pictures provided it could spark their interest more.
Meanwhile back to the word processor....
Thanks
John_O

Written by fellpony (1749 comments posted) 5th May 2007

I liked this and agree with TTK, but if I were you I'd get in touch with a publisher without troubling about illustrations; publishers usually have their own favourite artists and those who work in these genres are experienced enough to visualise the tale without needing illustrations. There are good hints to would-be authors of children's books, given in the Writers' and Artists' YB and Writers' Handbook publishers' lists.

Think about what age you'd pitch it to. I'd want more feeling of "an ending" if I were reading it to a young child. It doesn't need much added

An ending
Written by John_O (151 comments posted) 7th May 2007

Hi FP, many thanks for taking the time to put pen to paper.
I agree that the poem as it stands has no ending and I have to admit I can't see quite how to give it one. The structure is so self repetitive that it almost wants to run on and on.
But you have started the wheels turning and I'm sure something will surface given a little time.
On the subject of a target age I have to confess that I'm rather adrift from such technicalities - I simply think of it for a young child starting to read, and that age can vary widely I believe.
So thanks again for the helpful comments- now I must go, I feel an ending coming on....
John_O

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