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Oh, What A Beautiful Mornin' (in the A & E)
By wltshr
17 April 2007
I just couldn't help myself.

There's a bright, golden cyst on her elbow
There's a bright, golden cyst on her elbow
The stye in her eye looks so terribly sore
And it seems to be dripping all over the floor.

Oh, what a beautiful Mornin'
Oh, what a beautiful day.
I've got a beautiful feelin'
Everything's goin' my way.

All the patients are bleeding profusely
All the patients are bleeding profusely
They daren’t make a move or they’ll slip on the tiles
And the sick on the trolleys are backed up for miles

Oh, what a beautiful Mornin'
Oh, what a beautiful day.
I've got a beautiful feelin'
Everything's goin' my way.

Oh the joy of a busy department
Oh the joy of a busy department
To be making a profit for my PCT
Makes the happiest hospital manager, ME!

Oh, what a beautiful Mornin'
Oh, what a beautiful day.
I've got a beautiful feelin'
Everything's goin' my way.
Oh, what a beautiful day!

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Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 17th April 2007
Watto Wiltie, 
 
Bollywood are doing a remake of Oklahoma. 
It is being completely reset and centres on a very poor curry house that always burns the food.. 
 
The stand-out song is 
 
"The Curry with the singe on top" 
 
Brian

Written by Fledermaus (3238 comments posted) 17th April 2007
It seems your hospital manager realy loves his job. At least he seems to have a twisted sort of humor next to a taste for money. Most only seem to have the latter. 
A bit nasty, but enjoyable.
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Written by fellpony (1580 comments posted) 17th April 2007
the trolley with the syringe on top? 
 
You might consider also doing a word-link to replace the bits of orchestral twittering between vocal lines: 
"Don't throw - bouquets at me" (SAUS-age and bacon)  
"Don't hold - my hand too much" (OLD copper piping)  
"Don't stand - in the rain with me" (DAIsies and vi'lets)  
"I think we ought to go Dutch". 
 
mustn't hijack your jokes though. Funny stuff, sir, well done.

Written by stevetroster (1549 comments posted) 18th April 2007
I do hope that at some point in the future, that you will be releasing a compilation CD. 
As usual I loved your makeover, so you do at least have the blessing of Satan. But.... beware the wrath of God!

Written by wltshr (300 comments posted) 18th April 2007
Thank you, Brian, Fledermaus, Fellpony and Steve, for your kind words. Glad you liked it. 
 

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