I wrote this some time ago, but I'm not too sure about it. Same crime, same place, different age and attitudes...
1007 AD The nobleman guided his horse towards the gallows' field. There he could see the pale bones stuck to the wooden wheel. The hooves trampled the blades of grass, still brown with blood. Ravens took to the sky reluctantly as the living beast approached. The knight looked down upon the rags and the rotting flesh. All that held together the remains were the leather straps that had once kept the crook from running away. Here he hung, until the crows would have eaten his tendons and his limbs would drop into the mud. The knight sniffed and then spit a ball of slime upon the dead creature's skull. It served thieves to be hung, but thieves who stole from the house of God were beyond salvation. Justice was done and the court of Heaven would decide the punishment for this villain. Until then his corpse would hang unto the wheel, just outside the town's gate, as a warning for all to see, a sign that no-one could escape the law. 2007 AD The social worker saw them smoking on the parking lot just outside the old town's gate. He had to talk to the boy again. The teenager had had the stupid idea to take money from the church's offertory-box. He had forced the main door and simply walked into the building. There he had opened the box with a screwdriver. Obviously he had hoped to get away with it, but the vicar had noticed him and called the police. The social worker had asked him why he had done it, but he had just shrugged. He wanted a new cellphone and cellphones were expensive, the church was rich enough and wouldn't miss it and no, he did not want to go back to school again. Of course the social worker understood that the problems came from the boy's difficult childhood. His parents were divorced, his father was unemployed, his mother alcoholic and he hung around with the wrong kind of people. Deep inside there was a good kid, but he was just a victim of todays society. He couldn't help it... |
Written by stevetroster (1555 comments posted) 17th April 2007 | Interesting read. Some parts were a little lost in translation, eg "Here he hung, until the crows would have eaten his tendons and his limbs would drop into the mud.", but enjoyable non-the-less. Of course, there are some parts of the world where the 1007A.D. approach is still used (the lopping off of hands and the stoning of unfaithful wives etc..) Some would call it barbaric, but is it any less barbaric to have total disregard for your fellow human beings in a so called civilized society(theft, assault, muder, etc..) I found it somewhat strange when I read a report on the 'latest' US gun-crime obscenity, that the police had decided not to act after the initial two shootings as they felt that they were an isolated incident. So if you want to kill someone in a civilized country, just remember to keep the numbers down and you should be okay! I shall now get down of the soap box and say once again... Enjoyed, needs a little tidy up, doesn't need the intro as it is cleverereverer enough without having to be explained. Best wishes Steve. | Written by Janie (265 comments posted) 17th April 2007 | | one extreme to the other...good contrast in attitudes and punishments...very thought provoking on many levels, about people and how god's role has deminished in a thousand years...whether that's a good thing or bad, how we've become 'civilized' in comparison to the knight's time..i wonder how it would be in 1507AD...would they have got the balnce right? i did enjoy your descriptions of the knights approach to the town...very vivid...nice piece thanks for the read. | Hi Fledermaus Written by jean.day (2283 comments posted) 18th April 2007 | | I thought this was well written. I am glad that I don't live in 1007, for all the failings and weaknesses of our current age. | Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3362 comments posted) 18th April 2007 | Wonderfully written piece. There was even two wiriting styles for each section, ironically the first seemed to be written "in colour" and the second in "black and white" But they were both of their time. I took two things away from this #1 How relgion had such a barbaric,bruatalising effect on people when it held sway. #2 If the vicar had caught them, he would either have been charged with assault or false imprisonment. The conclusion is we never seem to get it right. cheers Jane
| Written by Fledermaus (3307 comments posted) 18th April 2007 | Thanks everyone. Steve: That's why I hope this piece doesn't choose sides for either approach. The medieval methods were barbaric, but today's attitudes sometimes seem equally perverse. Janie: I'm afraid that the 1507 attitude would not be too different from the 1007 one Maybe that in 1807 or 1907 they found the balance? I don't know. As far as I know justice systems have never been perfect. Jean: And so am I. Their methods of getting a confession were equally brutal, so I wonder how many innocents died at the gallow or the wheel. And the sight of mutilated corpses doesn't seem a pleasant one to me. BBS: You're right about the style, but I wasn't too pleased with the second part, as (inspite of less typos) it seemed to read more difficult. I deliberately tried to avoid giving an opinion, as somehow I think universal values don't exist and our views reflect our own age and education, rather than absolute right or wrong. The medieval knight may have been as disgusted about the social worker as the social worker may have been about the knight... | Written by anorwegianwood (278 comments posted) 18th April 2007 | I thought this was a very nicely constructed piece. Short, but with a lot going on under the surface. ~Claire | Written by Fledermaus (3307 comments posted) 19th April 2007 | Thanks Claire  | Hi Batty. Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 20th April 2007 | There never seems to be a "Baby Bear's" position things seem always to be too hard or too soft. Footnote-In 1807 they would probably have sent the offender to the Colonies. In 1907 they would have sent them to Dartmoor breaking rocks for seven years. So 1807 reflects a deepening of the Barbarity and 1907 a move in the right direction. Brian | Written by Phil (6730 comments posted) 21st April 2007 | Enjoyed this for its clever use of contrast. I assume this is also a problem in the Netherlands. Over here, it seems the worst in society, especially if they are young, are given every reward they want and asked to take no responsibility for themselves. I thought your piece flagged up the two extremes very well. Is there a happy medium? If there is, I'd like to know what it is. On a soap box note: driven from Blackpool (hideous place) to Bolton today. Passed, or was passed by about seven police patrol cars. On Thursday at school, someone threw a brick at a window of a classroom full of eight and nine year olds. The police have yet to attend the scene. Soap box put away for now. Good piece. Phil | Written by Gill21 (566 comments posted) 22nd April 2007 | Very clever. A thousand years and a world apart. I whole heartedly agree with Jane's comments in that the way you changed your writing style for the passages, made the first seem more alive and the second grey. There was a passion behind the first passage, and a sadness behind the second. Perhaps an unintended reflection on todays society? We can't seem to get the balance right. Brutality comes in many shapes and forms. Great | Written by Fledermaus (3307 comments posted) 23rd April 2007 | Thanks Brian, Phil and Gill. Brian: Probably so. Yet no justice system was ever optimal.It should be worth something to consider the statistics and stories from the early 1900s... Phil: Same here indeed. Brats consider themselves victims and the governments spoils them to get them quiet. I don't know how politicians think, but it seems to me the message is: Misbehave and you can ask whatever you want... Gill: Personally I wasn't too pleased with the second half, but I'm glad you interpreted it that way, for indeed it may be true. In the Middle Ages there was a lot of passion little mercy, in todays society it's all statistics and empty words... |
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