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Written by stevetroster (1601 comments posted) 20th April 2007 |
Not familiar with the Thompson twins, I'm more of an RPWL or Porcupine Tree man myself.
That said, and unfamiliar lyrics aside, a very enjoyable tale.
I guess that we must all look back sometimes and wonder what would have happened had we taken the leap, or walked another path.
Perhaps I wouldn't be here now writing this revue!
Best wishes
Steve. |
Hi ST
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 20th April 2007 |
It's a Fairport Convention Song.
Thanks for your thoughts and I'm glad you enjoyed it. As you get older you gather "what ifs" like otherold ruins gather ivy,
Brian |
Written by stevetroster (1601 comments posted) 20th April 2007 |
| Thompson twins was a pun! Do you think that I've never heard of airport conventions? I've attended a few I'll have you know. |
Oops
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 20th April 2007 |
| I'd not heard of the Thompson Twins. |
Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3590 comments posted) 20th April 2007 |
Neither have I but I have heard of Richard and Linda Thompson which led me to lissten to Fairport Convention and I know the song you quote. I know the singer isn't Linda but she does have a great voice and it is a really haunting song. And the story is an interesting take on the eternal "what if" question and wondering about the choices made [and not made] It's odd how songs can spark a train of thought.
J |
Hi Bubbles
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 20th April 2007 |
Funnily enough for once it was the other way round. I've found a new writer's group. They are very structured and for next months meeting will involve reading pieces written that have in their plot line climbing a cliff to meet someone.
We were then selected a slip of paper and on it was the genre. This really started in a different direction but somehow th song came into my mind and the tale followed.
It is however autobiographic.
Brian. |
Written by woody44 (777 comments posted) 20th April 2007 |
I think the Thompson twins played cricket for Australia...however, liked the story Brian. Life is full of `what ifs` I suppose. Perhaps if I`d taken up writing earlier instead of messing about as a radio ham..but what`s the point of looking back..onwards to that six-figure book deal with Bloomsbury...
happy writing
Woody |
Watto Woody.
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 20th April 2007 |
Glad you liked the story. So many what if's, so many wrong turns. They do seem to accumulate wih age,
Brian. |
BRN & BBS
Written by stevetroster (1601 comments posted) 20th April 2007 |
The Thompson Twins were a new wave group who had hits in 1984 with 'Hold Me Now' & 'Doctor, Doctor' etc.
Named after the two detectives from Tintin.
Neither of the above were Australian. |
Written by Fledermaus (3506 comments posted) 20th April 2007 |
| Lyrics can be very inspiring. I must say that this wasn't an easy read, especially because of the way you wove the lyrics into it. That's one way to get one to read it thrice, but although the message is an interesting one, this one was a bit too allegorical for me. |
Watto ST
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 20th April 2007 |
| Were they by any chance a trio involving two gay blokes and a woman? |
Written by stevetroster (1601 comments posted) 20th April 2007 |
| Trio yes, as for the rest? On the subject of 'as for'... have you read Norton Hole? It should have been called Neal Hole. |
Gooday...
Written by woody44 (777 comments posted) 20th April 2007 |
| Bill Thompson was a slow left arm spinner and Jack still holds the record for chewing his way through twelve packets of Wrigleys whilst amasing three hundred runs in just over two hours....They turned to music when they became too old to run between the wickets... |
Watto Batty
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 20th April 2007 |
"I must say that this wasn't an easy read, especially because of the way you wove the lyrics into it."
This was a new approach because in the past I've interleaved; -
Lyrics and Prose E.G. "No illusion unshattered"
or
Lyrics and original verse-Little Tin Soldier/Army Dreamers.
or finally edited a lyric to turn it into a poem-Old man.
I also for the first time did not alter the original lyric which at times creates awkwardness E.G.
"You’ll have your chance again, then you can do the work for me".
could have become
"If we had our chance again, it would work for you and me"
That would then have led to a mass edit and the point of the piece would have been lost.
I'm sorry that you found it a difficult read but thank you for persevering with it and for for your comments,
Brian.
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Watto ST
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 20th April 2007 |
No I'll give it a read,
Brian |
G'Day to you too
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 20th April 2007 |
| 300 hundred runs in 2hours. Today they bowl 14 overs an hour so that would requirejust under 2 runs a ball. |
Written by anorwegianwood (278 comments posted) 21st April 2007 |
This piece is so abstract, it's hard to get a handle on it. I did enjoy it, but I prefer something with a little more meat to the description. That, however, may just be a matter of personal opinion. I thought it very well-written, even if it isn't exactly to my taste.
~Claire |
Hi Claire
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 21st April 2007 |
Thanks for your thoughtful comments.
This song has haunted me from the first moment that I heard it.
(I've just checked and I'm surprised to find that I have used all of the Lyrics).
I wanted to capture the song's haunting quality and incoporate the feelings that it generates in me.
"I thought it very well-written, even if it isn't exactly to my taste."-Praise indeed.
Once again thank you,
Brian.
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Like a dream...
Written by Gill21 (566 comments posted) 22nd April 2007 |
| I am unfamiliar with the song and haven't read the other reviews however i found this piece strangely alluring. It is a piece i could read over and over again and analyse for hours. Very interesting Brian. Very enjoyable. |
Hi Gill
Written by BrianRobertNeal (1195 comments posted) 22nd April 2007 |
A review beyond my wildest dreams.
It's so satisfying to touch base with a reader and fully share a piece with them.
Brian.
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