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Poetry
tattoo
By no1butClo
23 April 2007
Read someone's non-fiction piece with the same title and got a bit inspired - thankyou whoever wrote that!

I

When I walked into the parlour,
a mythical humming kept the air
on it's toes and the rest of us on
edge, waiting.

II

I wanted him to brand me, to
leave a mark upon the skin
I'm forced to live in, to make
my living in.

I wanted something to remind me;
there is only one way anything
should stay under my skin.

I was looking for an image, a mark
that wouldn't so much mark me out
as keep me to myself, true.

III

My muscles twitched at needle-prick,
but did not budge. I was tattoed in black
and red, still as ice with rhythm in my ears.

Reviews

Written by Fledermaus (3448 comments posted) 24th April 2007
No rhyme, but clearly a poem and it reads nicely too. Perhaps you didn't intend it, but it seemed to me there was a strange (but very enjoyable) mix of a somehat light tone and a heavy content. Not sure what caused that, but I think it's the first stanza.

Written by lyrikal_myrikal (2 comments posted) 16th May 2007
Having just been marked myself, I really like this; it has a positive feel about a subject which, lets face it, gets pretty negative coverage from most people. Maybe its an age thing?  
 
I also think the last stanza captures the moment perfectly, it made me smile. 
 
Anyone would think you had a tattoo yourself! Nice one

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