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Showing You Some Love
By amoryblaine
26 April 2007
Asking for sympathy
On broken bridges
I know not how to cry.

That's the feeling
Having found a fish
Thirsty- that longs to drink.

It's gotten me confused
This being loved thing
Hollow so hollow
The emptiness of a common reed flute.

Still music escapes
Eyelids clap,the breath becomes
As I run to hold tomorrow
You be the one
To take away all the joy and all the sorrow




 

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Written by Phil (6845 comments posted) 26th April 2007
Sorry Amory, far too subtle and opaque for me. Afraid the thirsty fish just sounds ridiculous. I can't find anything in this to focus on and work on. 
 
Sorry to be so negative. Of course, others may feel entirely differently. 
 
Phil.

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