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A Race Against Time
By tartqueen
15 July 2005
This is a poem inspired when I was coming home in the evening and there was a beautiful sunset over Bristol harbour.  I stopped and looked at it but it seemed like I was the only one to notice it.  Everybody else was rushing past without even looking.

Young boy on his way to school

Silently raises his head.

"Mother, can I climb the trees?"

"No time, no time" she said.

 

Young man and his lady friend

Rise from their warm bed.

"Let us walk amongst the trees".

"No time, no time" she said.

 

Business man on his way to a meeting

Watches the sky turn red.

"See the sunset over the trees".

"No time, no time" they said.

 

Death walks in with scythe and hour glass

Come to collect the dead.

"Wait!  Let us stand and look at the trees!"

"No time, no time" he said.

Reviews
inspired
Written by silversnake (23 comments posted) 18th July 2005
I enjoyed reading this, a profound and accessible comment on how to waste a life. Nice rhythm carries you to the inevitable, deserved ending.
well constructed and delivered
Written by kevinrobson73 (371 comments posted) 19th July 2005
created desire 
couldn't wait to get from one stanza to the next to get to the pay off stanza 
well done

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