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The Universe and I
By ellipinnock
27 April 2007
They say the Universe may be made of strings,
thirty-five zeros worth of minimalism vibrating away.
Closed and open. Splitting and combining.

Screwing my eyes shut until sunshine yellow bruises
float in my vision, I can almost see them pinned to my eyelids,
wriggling in perpetual motion, light-dazzled,
their minuteness encompassed in a vastness without an edge
that I can peer over. If the strings are right I may be as close as can be
to another dimension, yet infallibly separated, no way to bridge
that infinitessimally tiny gap.

I, and all I was and all I might ever hope to be are trapped
in the fifth dimension, with all our choices: made and yet to make;
no way beyond, no concept of escape so why fret and agonise
over second chances and fleeting opportunities?
If there is another time around I may even return as a tortoise
in which case you are certain to be a hare, and again we will sit
close as can be, yet infinitely far apart.

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Written by Fledermaus (3506 comments posted) 28th April 2007
Interesting how you can make fundamental science sound romantic. 
A physician once tried to explain this to us students of other subjects. After his talk we understood even less of it than before. 
Yet these kinds of things remain fascinating...

Written by Phil (6997 comments posted) 28th April 2007
Like all of your best stuff, I got more out of this each time I read it. Modern science appears to be becoming more mysterious, organic and almost spiritual. This captures that very well. The scientific aspects being focused to a human emotion. Enjoyed the contrasts too. 
 
Top stuff. 
 
Phil.
HI Elli
Written by jean.day (2387 comments posted) 29th April 2007
Lovely poem. I particularly liked the sunshine yellow bruises floating in your vision.

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