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Diary of a Stalker
By Asferthecat
29 April 2007
Inspired by Peeano1's stalker. My first attempt at diary-style. Hope it works.
I've sexed it up a bit after Steve's advice.

Sept 10
Dear diary my first day at university and I am IN LOVE.
I saw him at the fresher's meeting. He is G-O-R-G-E-O-U-S. Tall and dark with pale skin like Johnny Depp. I managed to get close enough to see his name badge Vlad Pett. A bit like Brad Pitt eh?

Sept 11
WOW. He is in my geology class. I couldn’t believe it when he walked through the door. My heart stopped beating and I nearly keeled over. We were put in pairs to study rocks. Please let him be paired with me I begged (telepathically, of course) but it didn’t work. He has been paired with a big blonde with a short skirt and a rose tattooed on her ankle – TART.
I couldn’t take my eyes off him
Hair = obsidian
Skin = quartz
Eyes = alexandrite
He has lovely pale hands with long fingers. I bet he’s good at IT.

Sept 15
Vlad is short for Vladimir. Pett is short for Pettitski. He’s a Count from Eastern Europe – apparently they have alot of Counts over there. How ROMANTIC
He is a mature student so he doesn’t live in hall like the rest of us. He has a flat in town.
I followed him after lectures one afternoon to see where he lives and it’s above a chip shop.
Mmmmmm something tells me I am going to be eating a lot of fish and chips LOL

Sept 20
DESPAIR Vlad is going out with the big blonde. We all call her BB (short for blousy bitch? Ha ha).
The film club were showing “Knife in the Water” and Vlad and BB were cuddling in the back row – it ruined my evening.

Sept 23
Saw Vlad and BB in the coffee bar. I managed to sit at the next table and could hear Vlad arguing with a couple of blokes about vampires. He said it was rubbish they couldn’t come out in daylight and one of the blokes said how did he know- did he come from Transylvania?
Vlad was furious, He grabbed BB and stormed out.
Ooooooh he is so handsome when he’s angry. I wish he would grab me like that.
I managed to get his sugar wrapper for my treasure box.

Spet 30.
A BRILL day. BB has gone. Apparently she left a note at her hall to say she had been offered a modelling job in London and she never came back.
Poor Vlad. He is soooooo upset. There is a little muscle that twitches in his cheek. I wish I could kiss it. I would soon make him forget the blousy bitch.
How could she leave such a gorgeous man? She must be LOONY.

Oct 2
A weird evening. I was at the chip shop when I saw Vlad leave the flat carrying a parcel. I rushed out to say hello but he was half way down the street so I followed him. He went into the park. It was all dark and spooky so I hung around until he came out again - WITHOUT the parcel. Luckily he didn’t see me. I would hate him to think I was a stalker LOL.

Oct 3
I was at the chip shop again (I’ve gained three pounds in a month!) when Vlad came out of his flat with ANOTHER parcel. This time I followed him into the park and I saw him bury it under a bush. Weird or what?

Oct 4
JOY JOY JOY JOY
I went out early this morning, dug up the parcel and opened it! YUK It was a foot – with a rose tattoo on the ankle. BB never went to London after all.
Next thing I know Vlad is standing beside me – with another parcel. While I helped him bury it he told me what happened. They had had an argument and the stupid bitch had attacked him with a knife. Luckily she had tripped and fallen on the knife and had killed herself. Poor Vlad. He hadn’t dared tell the police in case they deported him and he would never see me again.
YES it was me he loved all along. He fancied me from the first time he saw me but was too shy to let me know.
He took me in his arms and we kissed for the first time. At first it was gentle, than as the passion took hold he slid his tongue into my mouth and aaah I finished up feeling weak at the knees.
I could hardly walk so he helped me back to his flat with one arm around my waist and then he laid me on the bed and we continued kissing and then ...... suffice to say we missed morning lectures and I felt so pink and gooey all through afternoon lectures that everyone must have known what had happened. 
I’m sooooooooo HAPPY

Oct 10
Exactly one month since I first set eyes on my gorgeous boyfriend and exactly one week since we first made love - sigh.
I was right about those long pale fingers - he does things to me that make me feel like I am in heaven. I never knew what an orgasm was till I met him. He says he has a few surprises still in store - I can't wait. I am in LOVE LOVE LOVE
Countess Pettitski. I’ve been practising my new signature. Only joking - sort of.
Vlad’s parents are coming to England and he is going to take me to meet them.
I have spent all my allowance on a new outfit – silk suit with matching shoes FAB.
We have got to keep it secret. His parents are famous in their own country and they hate journalists.
I’ve had a brilliant idea – I am going to tell my hall that I am going up to London for the weekend to do a modelling job. Just like BB. Ha ha.

Reviews
Love is blind!
Written by stevetroster (1907 comments posted) 29th April 2007
Or she's an airhead, I'll go with airhead. 
This was one of those ideas that again could (and should) be much longer, a 'Mole meets Jones in vampire shock horror' novel. 
I think you should play more with this toy, extend it a bit, fill it out more, more girlie daydreaming - or even real dreams. 
DAY SEVEN: "Wow! Last night I drempt that I was snoggin him and he put his hand up my jumper! It was just getting good when my roomie started snoring and woke me up. 
DAY EIGHT: "She did it again!! Must go in to town and buy some ear plugs". 
I enjoyed the story but would like to read a longer version. Would prefer real dates, rather than day seven etc. Oh! and some delibrat spelling misstakes. 
 
Best wishes 
Steve.

Written by Fledermaus (4146 comments posted) 29th April 2007
Considering your other recent pieces I doubt your narrator is an airhead. Someone who doesn't get suspiscious when someone is burrying chopped off limbs could of course be incredibly dumb, but she could also be of the very same kind. 
Of course the style reflects that of a valgirl, but then, maybe a dangerous valgirl? After you had a kid kill a creep in your latest piece, I won't be surprised if this bimbo's last name is Van Helsing... 
Certainly an enjoyable read.
Thanks
Written by Asferthecat (876 comments posted) 29th April 2007
Thanks for the feedback. She is definitely an airhead but the female Van Helsing idea raises intriguing possibilities for another story. 
I wish I could expand my writing every attempt at a novel has come to a stop after 25,000 words. 
If anyone wants to play with my toys they are more than welcome. 

Written by Janie (265 comments posted) 29th April 2007
hold on a minute...i swear that orgasm wasn't there before. :grin his long fingers LOL!! 
 
great idea, this..i like. you could have so much fun with it if you expanded a bit more too...she deserves what she gets though if she didn't bat an eyelid at him burying BB's body parts..maybe he's dracula's great grandson and has hypnotised her.

Written by Phil (8764 comments posted) 1st May 2007
Amusing, if brief, read. Enjoyed it. 
 
Sorry to hear about your novel. I got about 9000 words into mine and hit a wall. 
 
Phil.
Thanks 2
Written by Asferthecat (876 comments posted) 1st May 2007
I have changed the days to dates and padded it out a bit more, but I still don't think the diary format works as well as a normal short story. 
Many thanks for the feedback :roll

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