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Non-Fiction
Necessity
By Goddess
30 April 2007
I wrote this piece after I came back from Auschwitz on a History trip across Hungary, Poland and Germany. I wrote this mostly to sort the confusion out in my mind and because I thought it was so important - not only for me - but for others to try and understand what really happened at Auschwitz and the significance of it. Hope this gives an insight.

‘Forever let this place be a cry of despair and a warning to humanity where the Nazis murdered about one and a half million men, women and children, mainly Jews, from various countries of Europe
Auschwitz - Berkanau
1940-1945’



I stared at the plaque deep in thought. I stared at the stones from the visitors past. I did not however stare merely at the stones but rather what they represented. The rocks represented a life taken from so long ago in history.
My mind was cast back to the gas chamber that echoed with silent screams and terrified tears. Every man or woman entering the room imagines the horror crystallised in the room as the ceiling shafts used to open, down, which the Nazi gassed all the innocent Jews and political prisoners standing below. Through the next door was the crematorium, which I’m sure, smells sweeter now than it did 66 years ago. Ghosts of the past seem to writhe into people’s heart and minds. Never had I felt so connected to something that was nothing to my generation. Is the war is now simply whispers forgotten over time? Or is it more than that?

My head still spun with questions. Why did they do it … well of course I knew ‘why’ what I mean is - WHY. How could anybody kill innocent people on mass? How could they sleep at night when they went home to their own naive families? They feed their families a feast in contrast to their owns prisoners who ate scarcely more than six ounces of bread. This was not enough to eat away at the feeling of starvation that plagued their every waking moments.
 
Here I am. Alive. Well. My life seems peaceful. When asked to describe Auschwitz words seem empty and descriptions seem understated. Nobody understands the sheer size of the people murdered throughout the concentration camps of Poland and Germany – Six million people. It is just a number and this very number is hard to imagine. These prisoners were treated below animals and were overwhelmed with the heavy contemplation of death. For some the Star of David seems to be more of a burden– a sign of death and suffering whilst the swastika overruled it with secret plans. The Final Solution.
 
My own great-grandmother had survived a concentration camp... which one I will never know. It is not a question that is asked in polite conversation to grandparents or parents and so forth. My Grandad fought in the war and my Great-Grandfather in the First World War and still war is a mystery to me.

When I saw the tears on the faces around me, my fellow students crying for a past that they were neither part of or understand, I seemed to put a key into a lock that I have never thought existed. A secret door where the unknown resides. The forbidden fruit. Knowledge. The key clicks and fingers tremble on the door handle. Opening to a world of horror that nobody has ever known. To a world where people are made to question their moralities. Now when I attached the blood red poppy to my jacket, it will remind me of the six million people who died in these camps and the many more that died for what they believed was morally right.

I turned around from the plaques to stare at the length of the track in Berkanau. I remembered the Berlin Holocaust Memorial – two thousand seven hundred stone slabs each to represent the thousands of people who perished in the hands of the Nazi. Some people hate this memorial. It’s cold and heartless, people say. It is a reminder to all humanity. It is the not wanting to see it… but it is the Necessity to do so. The Necessity to open the door to a heart-wrenching truth. The Necessity to learn from history. The Necessity never to let it happen again.

Reviews

Written by rui (150 comments posted) 30th April 2007
It's a very thoughtful and moving piece, let down only by some problems with keeping the tenses consistent. Sorry to be nit-picky: 
 
Typo-watch: 
2nd para, "used to open, down, which the Nazi" no need for a comma after "down" 
3rd para, "kill innocent people on mass" - on mass is normally en masse, I think. 
 
Tense-watch #1: it jumped from past to present and back, which I found difficult to follow. Even when dealing with generalisations, it still happened before, so should be in the past. 
2nd para, "entering the room imagines" - imagined 
2nd para, "past seem to" - seemed 
3rd para, "They feed their families " - fed 
also: "Now when I attached the blood red poppy to my jacket, it will remind me of the six million " past or future? I think you want present-continuous, "Now, when I attach the blood-red poppy to my jacket, it reminds me..." 
 
Tense-watch #2:  
"mind was cast" - past passive is difficult to read. Consider "I cast my mind back" 
"great-grandmother had survived" past-continuous, "my grandmother survived" would work better. 
 
Just a little polishing would go a long way.  
 
On the subject, my history in this area is very flakey. I am somewhat familiar with the story of other massacres in this war, by other factions, though. Each has its own memorial and each is an unpleasant reminder necessary to keep those of my generation from forgetting the lessons of my great-grandparents' generation.

Written by Goddess (124 comments posted) 30th April 2007
Thanks very much for your crit! It was very helpful, I do always trip up on those tenses. I will edit them for you.  
 
We studied the Second World War last year in class and Auschwitz on the trip was the most moving experience I've ever had.  
 
Thank you again for your comment, I'll polish up on the bit you mentioned. 
 
Goddess

Written by Bottleblondesurfer (3590 comments posted) 30th April 2007
The grammar has already been mentioned so I'll leave that to you. I thought you treated the subject very sensitively. When you are confronted with an atrocity on that scale it is bound to pull you up short and make you think and you have expressed your thoughts clearly yet movingly. I haven't been to Auschwitz but I have been to the Holocaust Museum in Jerusalem and the horror is seen from the other side and like you I was moved to put something in writing.  
There is a necessity to learn from history but we never do.The only thing history teaches us is that we learn nothing from it. I expect it will happen again, sometime. 
cheers 
Jane

Written by Goddess (124 comments posted) 30th April 2007
You are very right - people do not learn from history. It seems that so many mistakes that start war have been done before (even in the Medieval period!!) 
 
Thanks for your comment. I'm glad it didn't seem to harsh. I was worried that I might offend some people as I know it is a very delicate subject. 
 
Goddess

Written by Fledermaus (3506 comments posted) 30th April 2007
Just seeing black and white images on TV makes me sick already and I can hardly watch a memorial without my eyes getting wet. 
It's already shocking that people can kill so easily in a war, but that a civilized people could turn into such monsters and slaughter civilians on an industrial scale, that's something I'll never understand. 
All the more shocking to realize that, inspite of the claim that this should happen 'never again', people did let it happen again in Pakistan, Cambodja, Bosnia Herzegovina, Ruanda... 
 

Written by Goddess (124 comments posted) 30th April 2007
I believe that in some instancely war is necessary - the Second World War needed to put an end to Hitler's Germany. He was a horrific genius and strange man. Apparently his book 'Mein Kampf' explain all his ideology and stuff (although its very long and difficult to read apparently) 
 
But in some instances war can be avoided but people never learn. The people from the First World War didn't learn that appeasement never words and applied it to Hitler in the Second World War.  
 
It's unbelievable the things that people will do in war - the concentration camps were horrid. There were grown women that would come out of the concentration camps at 5 stone!!!!! You could see every single one of their bones. It's very sad and unbeliveable.  
 
Maybe one day people will be strong enough to learn from these mistakes :sigh

Written by Phil (6997 comments posted) 1st May 2007
A sensitive, moving and effective treatment of a difficult subject. I fear BBS is right when she says what we learn from history is that we never learn. We prove it over and over and over. 
 
Good writing. Rui's points on grammar are important. Try reading your work aloud as you check, it can help. 
 
Phil.

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